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Rcook11x Posted 10 years ago
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Can someone please review this?
Can someone please review my short statement for the scholarship committee? Any input is appreciated! 
Without goals, life has no meaning. It is essential for me to frame my future because I am the artist of my own life, and I choose to paint my dreams into a reality. In the future I aspire to become a Sport Medicine Physician. Growing up, I had a burning passion for playing sports. Unfortunately my athletic capabilities were halted due to injury. While I was injured I got to meet many doctors. The experiences I had with those doctors left me enthusiastic about having a career as a Physician. I know what I want from life, and I’m willing to do anything to ensure that my dreams come true.
Without goals, life has no meaning. It is essential for me to frame my future because I am the artist of my own life, and I choose to paint my dreams into a reality. In the future I aspire to become a Sport Medicine Physician. Growing up, I had a burning passion for playing sports. Unfortunately my athletic capabilities were halted due to injury. While I was injured I got to meet many doctors. The experiences I had with those doctors left me enthusiastic about having a career as a Physician. I know what I want from life, and I’m willing to do anything to ensure that my dreams come true.
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I assume you want it to be simple and direct. It is. If the scholarship involves money, do you want to say something about why you need it?
- I assume you want it to be simple and direct.
- It is.
- If the scholarship involves money, do you want to say something about why you need it?
- Clive
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I assume you want it to be simple and direct. It is.
If the scholarship involves money, do you want to say something about why you need it?
Clive
If the scholarship involves money, do you want to say something about why you need it?
Clive
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Yeah, I would like to say more, but the rules say you can only use 500 characters 
. Did I use proper grammar in my paragraph?
. Did I use proper grammar in my paragraph? 00
Here are a few edits to consider.
Without goals, life has no meaning. It is essential for me to frame my future because I am the artist of my own life, and I choose to paint my dreams into a reality. In the future I aspire to become a Sports Medicine physician. Growing up, I had a burning passion for playing sports. Unfortunately my athletic capabilities were halted
Without goals, life has no meaning. It is essential for me to frame my future because I am the artist of my own life, and I choose to paint my dreams into a reality. In the future I aspire to become a Sports Medicine physician. Growing up, I had a burning passion for playing sports. Unfortunately my athletic capabilities were halted
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Thanks, I appreciate the fast response! Just for future reference, why does "Sports Medicine" stay capitalized and "physician" become lower case?
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We commonly write
eg I am a physician.
eg I specialize in Sports Medicine.
Hence, I am a Sports Medicine physician.
I wouldn't argue that Sports Medicine Physician is wrong. It just suggest that you are thinking of it as a job title.
Clive
eg I am a physician.
eg I specialize in Sports Medicine.
Hence, I am a Sports Medicine physician.
I wouldn't argue that Sports Medicine Physician is wrong. It just suggest that you are thinking of it as a job title.
Clive
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