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0 00 It is a compare and contrast essay by interview two people on thie views about living together. 02 br
00 please feel welcome to leave comments or help me correct some of the mistakes.Thanks! 02 br
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00 Nowadays, heterosexual cohabitation is very common and a new trend of the world. Many couples choose cohabitating with each other before they get married or living together before they get married. Some people consider that living together can not only maintain their own privacy, but also can enjoy the time they spend with each other. The problems that arise due to cohabitation are no less than those caused by marriage. On the other hand, I believe that there are many reasons may lead people to think about cohabitation and people of different ages would have varied opinions on it. Therefore, I did an interview of people of different age’s opinions on living together to have a certain understanding and analyze the problems about it. I interviewed two people and they are Thomas and Amanda. Thomas is a 23 year old university graduate student in 01 00 Australia 02 00 and he is working in one of the 00 universities as an assistant professor now. He adopted a serious and cautious attitude towards cohabitation. Amanda is a 15 year old Asian girl who studies in the States and began her school life in one of the community colleges in 00 . She has a positive attitude towards living together. Thomas and Amanda both have different point of views towards living together regarding on age, attitude, and responsibility. 02 br
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00 00 First, Thomas and Amanda have a comparison comments on age. I asked them about the suitable age to live together; two interviewees said there is no specific age. Thomas claimed that as long as a couple is mature enough to live on their own and can work independently, they can cohabitate with each other. However, Amanda said that a couple only needs to love each other deep from their heart and support each other. From what we observe, Thomas is more mature and Amanda did not aware of the importance of living together. 02 br
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00 00 About their attitudes towards cohabitation, Thomas and Amanda have contrary standpoints. Thomas believed that living together could help them to have a better understanding on each other; however, he conceived that cohabitation is all based on trust which couple should consider clearly about their goals before they make the choices. In comparison, Amanda thought that a couple can live together if they love each other. Before, they get married; living together could help them know more about their life styles and personalities she said. As we can see, Thomas adopted a cautious attitude towards cohabitation; however, Amanda did not consider living together in its entirety. 02 br
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00 00 In addition, Thomas and Amanda have similar standpoints on the responsibility. Living together may cause serious issues, such as financial problems and pregnancy which may affect their future. Both of the interviewees agreed that it is both parties fault if those problems are involved. Therefore, they cannot blame anyone because they agreed to live together. On the other hand, financial issues are always a problem for couple either living together or married. Thomas and Amanda mentioned that a couple should not live together unless they have adequate financial support. 02 br
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00 00 In conclusion, Thomas and Amanda‘s interview results are mostly different but they also share some similarities on the topic of heterosexual cohabitation. 01 b 01 u 00 Living together can be a step further towards marriage because both parties can accomplish their goals. 02 u 02 b 00 On the other hand, it is an experience on dating as they may not continue their relationship. However, it is not the only way which leads to marriage or the only way to understand each other better. Moreover, we can always achieve different kinds of goals by living together and it is all decided by the couple. 00 0-
00 please feel welcome to leave comments or help me correct some of the mistakes.Thanks! 02 br
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00 Nowadays, heterosexual cohabitation is very common and a new trend of the world. Many couples choose cohabitating with each other before they get married or living together before they get married. Some people consider that living together can not only maintain their own privacy, but also can enjoy the time they spend with each other. The problems that arise due to cohabitation are no less than those caused by marriage. On the other hand, I believe that there are many reasons may lead people to think about cohabitation and people of different ages would have varied opinions on it. Therefore, I did an interview of people of different age’s opinions on living together to have a certain understanding and analyze the problems about it. I interviewed two people and they are Thomas and Amanda. Thomas is a 23 year old university graduate student in 01 00 Australia 02 00 and he is working in one of the 00 universities as an assistant professor now. He adopted a serious and cautious attitude towards cohabitation. Amanda is a 15 year old Asian girl who studies in the States and began her school life in one of the community colleges in 00 . She has a positive attitude towards living together. Thomas and Amanda both have different point of views towards living together regarding on age, attitude, and responsibility. 02 br
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00 00 First, Thomas and Amanda have a comparison comments on age. I asked them about the suitable age to live together; two interviewees said there is no specific age. Thomas claimed that as long as a couple is mature enough to live on their own and can work independently, they can cohabitate with each other. However, Amanda said that a couple only needs to love each other deep from their heart and support each other. From what we observe, Thomas is more mature and Amanda did not aware of the importance of living together. 02 br
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00 00 About their attitudes towards cohabitation, Thomas and Amanda have contrary standpoints. Thomas believed that living together could help them to have a better understanding on each other; however, he conceived that cohabitation is all based on trust which couple should consider clearly about their goals before they make the choices. In comparison, Amanda thought that a couple can live together if they love each other. Before, they get married; living together could help them know more about their life styles and personalities she said. As we can see, Thomas adopted a cautious attitude towards cohabitation; however, Amanda did not consider living together in its entirety. 02 br
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00 00 In addition, Thomas and Amanda have similar standpoints on the responsibility. Living together may cause serious issues, such as financial problems and pregnancy which may affect their future. Both of the interviewees agreed that it is both parties fault if those problems are involved. Therefore, they cannot blame anyone because they agreed to live together. On the other hand, financial issues are always a problem for couple either living together or married. Thomas and Amanda mentioned that a couple should not live together unless they have adequate financial support. 02 br
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00 00 In conclusion, Thomas and Amanda‘s interview results are mostly different but they also share some similarities on the topic of heterosexual cohabitation. 01 b 01 u 00 Living together can be a step further towards marriage because both parties can accomplish their goals. 02 u 02 b 00 On the other hand, it is an experience on dating as they may not continue their relationship. However, it is not the only way which leads to marriage or the only way to understand each other better. Moreover, we can always achieve different kinds of goals by living together and it is all decided by the couple. 00 0-
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- 02 u 00 in your introductory paragraph because it tells us about a different thing.
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- 3)Obvioulsy you try to write a contrast paragraph 4)Please add that the two people you have made an interview with live in different countries in your sentence starting with 01 i 01 u 00 therefore I did an interview...
- 02 u 00 4) 02 i 00 Please omit the last sentence in your first paragraph starting with 01 u 00 Thomas and amanda both have...
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0 1) You should have your own title. 2)You should not add the sentences starting with 01 u 01 i 00 I interviewed two people 02 i 00 ... 02 u 00 in your introductory paragraph because it tells us about a different thing. It should be your first paragraph after the introductory one. 3)Obvioulsy you try to write a contrast paragraph 4)Please add that the two peop
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