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Breaking News: Brett Favre announced his decision today and has decided to return to the NFL for his 20th season. Brett Favre has also informed the Vikings that this will be his last NFL Season. The Minnesota Vikings will open the NFL season versus the New Orleans Saints."
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Brett Favre landed in Minnesota today for his first practice. Vikings defensive end Jarred Allen, kicker Ryan Longwell, and running back Adrian Peterson flew from Minnesota to Brett Favre's home in Mississippi to get an answer on whether if he will return to the NFL for his 20th season. The meeting lasted for thirty minutes; the players convinced Brett Favre that without him they do not stand a chance of returning to the NFC Championship. Brett Favre, who took a beating from the New Orleans Saints defense in the 2009 NFC Championship Game, was not sure after the game if he could return due to an ankle injury. Last week, Brett Favre sent a text message to the Vikings starting Tight end Visanthe Shiancoe saying that he had decided to retire due to concerns of his health.
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After another summer of will he or won't he. Brett Favre decided to return to the NFL for his 20th season. There had been many reports indicating that Brett Favre was retiring due to concerns about his ankle, and multiple reports from team's official that Brett Favre had sent text messages to Vikings Players informing them that he was retiring. Brett Favre denied that he sent out those text messages. Three Vikings players: Kicker Ryan Longwell, Defensive End Jared Allen, and Running Back Adrian Peterson decided to miss practice and fly to Brett Favre's home in Gulfport Mississippi to get an answer from Favre. Thirty minutes, later Brett Favre was on a plane back to Minnesota to practice. "The meeting went great" Ryan Longwell said. "We needed a 'yes' or a 'no,'" Allen said. "One way or the other. We were starting to get along in this preseason and that was it."

After arriving to Minnesota, Brett Favre participated in the team's practice where he threw footballs to receivers and received treatment on his surgically repaired ankle. One of Brett's main concerns is that his ankle will not last the entire season. Brett stated in an interview that "he came back for a reason, he wants to win another championship and he thinks that Vikings can do it. "This will be my last season." Favre Said. Many people doubt that but who knows. We will just have to wait until next summer to find out if Brett will finally hang up his pads and retire.

The Minnesota Vikings will kick off the NFL Season versus the New Orleans Saints. These teams met up in last year's NFC Championship game. The game, where Brett Favre took a beating from the Saints defense possibly ending his football career, and where he threw a costly interception to Saint's cornerback Tracy Porter sending the Saints to their first Superbowl.
  

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Hi; I've made some suggestions on the first few paragraphs. Breaking News: Brett Favre announced his decision today that he and has decided to return to the NFL for his 20th season. Brett Favre has also informed the Vikings that this will be his last NFL Season.

  • Hi; I've made some suggestions on the first few paragraphs.
  • Breaking News: Brett Favre announced his decision today that he and has decided to return to the NFL for his 20th season.
  • Brett Favre has also informed the Vikings that this will be his last NFL Season.
  • The Minnesota Vikings will open the NFL season versus the New Orleans Saints.
  • --------------- Brett Favre landed in Minnesota today for his first practice.
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I've made some suggestions on the first few paragraphs.

Breaking News: Brett Favre announced his decision today that he and has decided to return to the NFL for his 20th season. Brett Favre has also informed the Vikings that this will be his last NFL Season. The Minnesota Vikings will open the NFL season versus the New Orleans Saints.

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