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Anonymous Posted 8 years ago
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Can someone help to check my english and correct me?

Hi Yamamoto,


Please check in with grand opening’s core team directly.


They would need facility do some clarification with landlord on:

  1. How to better utilize the common area between the lobby
  2. Any restriction for them to cater in some external food, example: Chinese style breakfast- kaya toast, coffee and tea in the area.


Regards

Danielle Gan

  

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Hello, Danielle, You should address the recipient as 'Yamamato-san' or 'Mr. Yamamoto', not just 'Yamamoto'. As for the rest of your letter, I cannot understand it well enough to correct it.

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  • Hello, Danielle, You should address the recipient as 'Yamamato-san' or 'Mr.
  • Yamamoto', not just 'Yamamoto'.
  • As for the rest of your letter, I cannot understand it well enough to correct it.
  • Please supply more details or revise your sentences.
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Hello, Danielle,

You should address the recipient as 'Yamamato-san' or 'Mr. Yamamoto', not just 'Yamamoto'.

As for the rest of your letter, I cannot understand it well enough to correct it. Please supply more details or revise your sentences.

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Dear Yamamoto-san,


Please contact the Grand Opening core team.

Also, please ask the landlord:

  • how the core team can better utilize the lobby area
  • whether they are allowed to stream the video there.
  • whether they are allowed to serve food in the lobby

Thank you,

Danielle

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