Can someone help me with this letter thanks

Dear Mr. President,



First of all congratulations on your position!!!. You must know as well as I do that your position comes with much responsibilities that can overpower some people that is why not everyone wants to be the College President. I guess I will have to introduce myself first to you, my name is Carl Dewain Jefferson jr I live in Sacramento California. I study Fashion Merchandising at Sierra College in Rocklin California I am also 23 years old. I know my words may not sound as pleasing as an adult, since I told you my age now you might think I am not been serious or my voice is not loud enough to be heard. But I face responsibilities too, and I face challenges. That's why I am sending you this letter. The second reason I am sending you this letter is because I am very interested in your college, I would love to attend there and there are only 2 Universities in the state of California that has my major. I will be graduating in spring 2010 with an Associates degree in Fashion merchandising, and if I want to get a real job in this industry I would have to get a Batchers degree. I did research on Salery.com and it stated that 78% of people with batcher’s degrees get hired more than Associates degree which is 14%. When I was in high school I was once told by my teacher that “education is the key to success”. So what that means is if I want to succeed in life I must follow that concept. And I’ve been doing that ever since my father passed away when I was a teen and my mother incarcerated for 10 year in 2001.

My future is in this college hands and me getting accepted here will finish my long term goals and I will be among that 78% that will have an opportunity to work in this industry. I m not asking for a hand out. I am just asking for advice or ways of getting accepted or even a scholarship lol. At Sierra College I learned a lot about the fashion industry like: where did it come from, modeling, colors, business issues, costumes, fashion weeks in Paris, New York and Los Angeles, I learned how to sew clothing, make garments, cut different patterns, and I event took business mathematics which I leard about payroll, mark up and mark downs, and other business calculations. Well I want to thank you for reading this and hope I can continue my education there at California State University Of Long Beach GO 49ERS..

PS: I am also in love with politics, I’ve been in love with it even since the 9/11 I’ve been wondering what is the deal with how politicians work and how important it is to us when they make important decisions. I worked with Barack Obama’s campaign in 2008 in Dallas Texas as a Princinct Captain; my job was to make sure people was registered to vote, phone banking, and bringing in new volunteers. Then I went to Philadelphia to volunteer, also I was doing college outreach and what I was every college and bringing in new people to do canvassing, phone banking and making sure they was registered to vote. I enjoyed it because it was POSITIVE and a lot of people needed my voice to help them choose a good leader and how important it is to vote. Also I had to debate with a few undecided voters but it was fun.