Can someone help me with this graduate school letter?

Hi everybody. I desperately need help for somebody to proofread my letter for graduate school. I also need feedback, if I need to add or remove an idea/sentence to make this into a better letter. Thank you for your support.

P.S excuse me for the underlined/ highlighted words. Worry only about punctuation,grammar, ideas..etc.

To whom it may concern, ( this is how they told me to address it)

My name is xxxxxx and I am seeking admission to your Master’s Degree program in Human Movement and Sports, scheduled to start in January 2014. I am applying to this program because I believe my work experience and my well rounded academic background are the skills that make me into an ideal match for a career in the exercise sciences.

Since my childhood I have always been involved in sports and dancing. However my greatest passion of all physical activities was gymnastics. I began doing gymnastics at the age of nine. By the time, I was in high school. I had joined my high schools’ varsity team for two years in a row and competed throughout southern California. During my junior year of high school, I focused strictly in Ballet. Dancing became not only a hobby, but also a tool that would later help me perfect my coaching skills. By the time I was in college I had trained in gymnastics for a total of eight years and had reached a level seven, which is an upper competitive level by the USA Gymnastics governing body.

While studying in college, I obtained my first gymnastics coaching job working for two different YMCAs’ in Los Angeles, California. Three years later, I relocated to Arizona with a purpose to complete my bachelors’ degree. I was hire at a local dance studio known as The xxxxxx Arts Center in xxxxx, Arizona and was responsible to form a recreational gymnastics program for children. I had a lot of success and decided to also open up a Mexican folk dance class for children. I worked at this studio for a total of two years. After my college graduation I obtained an employment opportunity to work abroad.
Since the spring of 2013 I have been living in xxxxxx, Switzerland. A useful skill that has helped me a lot in my coaching career has been my ability to speak more than one language. I grew up speaking English and Spanish at home. I also studied foreign languages in college. My goal was to learn a third language fluently. Thus I majored in German Studies and graduated with a Bachelor of Arts degree from the University of Arizona. My German language skills got me a position as a gymnastics trainer for the Swiss Federation of Gymnastics. This job opportunity lead me to pursue further training and uptake educational courses at the Swiss Olympic Training Center in xxxxxxxx, Switzerland. My experience training there was unforgettable. I had the chance to work closely with coaches who have trained elite gymnasts in many of the previous Olympic Games. However I not only wanted to continue to coaching competitive gymnastics for aspiring olympians, but also recreational gymnastics for children.

In less than six months of having arrived to Switzerland, I have become the co-founder of a children’s recreational gymnastics program at an English-speaking pre-school known as xxxxxxxx in xxxxxx, Switzerland . With more than five years of coaching gymnastics I have acquired a lot of practical skills that are necessary to prepare talented gymnasts.
My passion for coaching led to my interest in exercise sciences. I have coached many young athletes for many years, but I have been wanting to work with those who are at a disadvantage. My aim is to help children who suffer from obesity and cardiovascular diseases. The Masters in Human Performance and Sport program caught my interest because of the courses that are offered by the department. If I am given the opportunity to be part of your program, I would focus on gaining a strong foundation in stress testing, psychology for coaching, and pediatric physiology. My goal is to not only enhance my previous coaching skills to add to my work experience, but also begin a new career in becoming an academic researcher and an advocate to fight against childhood obesity through promoting sports and dance programs for the community. It is my firm belief that the University of xxxxxx in xxxxx is an ideal place to achieve my career goals. It offers its students a quality education from a reputable university.

After doing some extensive research about the faculty at xxxxxx, I have found the professors to be excellent scholars and researchers in their respective fields of specialization. I look forward to working with Professor xxxxx and Professor xxxxxx, along with the rest of the faculty who are involved in the latest health issues that affect Americans. Thanks for considering my application. I look forward to hearing your acceptance and attending your program for this upcoming January of 2014.

Sincerely yours,

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