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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
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Personal Statement
I always heard the old people said, "Learn more when you are still young. If not so, you will be regret." I didn't listen to them until I felt "I should have done that when I have chance" this kind of feeling.
I was born in an ordinary family in Taiwan. When I was young, I never imagine I have to go to other country for the education. One day when I was 11 years old, my mom told me that we got the resident card from United States of America. Actually, I didn't know what the card was about at first. After the elementary school, my mom told me that I have to go to Seattle for middle school. I was so shocked, and I started to cry and told them I don't want to leave Taiwan. After few days, my mom told me I can stay in Taiwan until high school. Since I knew I am leaving Taiwan after middle school; something came out of my mind, "Why should I study? I still have to leave even I get good grade in middle school." So I gave up all the schoolwork and play every day.
Three years passed very fast; I left the place I knew very well and went to a totally strange country. My parents still need to work in Taiwan, so I went to Seattle alone. My uncle lived in Seattle since he graduated from university in Taiwan, so I came to Seattle and lived with him.
English is not an easy language since I have been speaking Chinese every single day. I still remember the first day I went to the bilingual school, and it was the first time I wanted to escape from the school. I was so scared about everything because I didn't know what they were talking about. I stand on the hallway of school for ten minutes until a Chinese teacher saw me and asked me I am Chinese or not. I started to make friends in bilingual school, but all the friends I made were Chinese. I was afraid to have an English conversation with other countries people because I was fearful to speak a new language, and this kind of thought stayed with me until now.
After a semester of bilingual school, I went to a regular high school, Roosevelt High School, for freshmen. If I had a chance, I would really wanted go back to high school and studied hard. I almost wasted all four years in high school and didn't even learn stuff. I hated my parents in the first few years in Seattle because I didn't know why were they left me here alone. I was really upset every single day during the first year in Seattle. Actually, I think I have no talent in study. I really think I was the kind of person that needs people to show me the way I have to go. Unlike Taiwan, we could choose the classes we wanted in high school. My uncle didn't concern with the class I chose, so I always chose the easiest classes in high school with some friends. I keep getting bad grade in high school. And the last year of high school, the biggest thing happened in my family. My dad caught a cold for one month, and one day he felled down in a faint. After the hospital examined, they found out my dad had lung cancer and it was in the end stage. I went back to Taiwan when I heard it from my mom. But my dad still passed away after few days I went back. During the last couple month of high school, I had no mood to do anything. So I didn't even apply for the university.
I went to Bellevue Community College after high school. The first year of college, I was still didn't care about my grade. The only thing I thought was "There's only two years last, and then I can go back to Taiwan." The summer of my first college year, my mom came to USA to visit me. I went to the airport to pick up my mom with my uncle. I was so shocked when I saw my mom because she looked aging than before. I talked to her at night and asked what happened in Taiwan. And she didn't say too much, but I knew it was the pressure about money. My mom didn't have a normal work; she used to help my dad to arrange the schedule. At this moment, I felt so sorry to my mom and dad. I finally noticed I was wrong, I couldn't believe I hate them for so many years. I also noticed they reluctant to let me leave them and came to USA to pursue a better education. But everything I have done made them disappointed. I felt like I grew up during the one month stay with mom. I knew I have to study hard and set up the goal to get in University of Washington. I started to quit watching the drama and show as I do every day before. But the degeneracy of those years made the study gets harder for me. Every time when I wanted to get concentrated to study, I started to felt sleepy. I couldn't concentrate in a book for 10 minutes at first, so I still couldn't get better grade in college. Even I got more advancement right now; my grade still couldn't rise as well as I wanted. I always dropped the classes because I think I will get a better grade next time I take it. But I was wrong; if you didn't study hard, you will never get advance even you retake the class more than one time. I have noticed this right now, so I will try harder and harder to study. And I don't want to make my mom disappointed again. The only thing in my mind was get in University of Washington.
Computer was one of my favorite entertainments, and I can't live without computer for one day. One of my consanguineous brothers was a computer programmer. He always told me what computer programmer did. He had show me how he programming, it really made me surprised when I was in young age. So when I was in young age, I was always dreaming to be a computer programmer. When I was in college, I took the computer science classes. But I felt I didn't have that kind of talent to become a professional computer programmer. This made me disappointed for a while. But after I looked all the majors in University of Washington, I found out my dreaming major, Informatics. Informatics is interested in the relationship between information, technology, and people. In this major, I didn't have to programming whole day. It was more about communicated in this major. I was really bad communicating with people, but I would really want to change. This might be a big challenge for me, but I am not afraid because this is the biggest course I have to learn in my life. Computer programming was my dreaming job and communicating was my biggest course, so Informatics major has both two main points that I wanted to study.
I wish to be able to transfer in the fall of 2010. If I get in to the Informatics, I would want to go back to Taiwan this summer. And take the computer programming class again in Taiwan to get more knowledge about programming. I would know more if I take the class with my natural language. After I graduated from University of Washington, I would try to get in the graduate school to get more knowledge. I have already wasted so many years, so I need more years to catch up.
The past can't be start over. We can't kept look the past; we should keep looking forward. Even though I was regret all the things that I have done before, but when you think in another way. The mistakes you have taken would be the experience you have faced. At least I know the way I have to go; some people might be still looking for their way to go. So if I think in this way, I know I was the lucky one because I already found it and I am on the way.
  
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