Can someone fix my ielts task 2

It is undeniable that information plays an important role in most areas which can improve the economy and make people s life better than ever. Because of that importance, some people agree that sharing information as much as possible should be done. Others claim that some specific information is so important which cant be shared easily. While there are some benefits in sharing information, i would argue that it is better to make some restrictions.

On one hand, sharing information as much as possible in science, business and academy can hepj the developing or undeveloped countries improve much faster. Because the reason make the developed countries different from other types is information. When those countries get the those valuable information and put it into practice, it can reduce the gap between them. Besides, each country has the different approach and advantage which can help them use the statistics in an effecive way.

On the other hand, there are some classified information that cant be share easily without some restrictions. For instance, in scientific aspect, data about nuclear weapon is not easily shared. If it is shared globally, terrorists will use that to threate countries or else they can use those to damage people. Another example is statistics about economy which must be kept in secret, other countries will use those as a weapon to harm the economy of others.

In my point of view, while sharing information can have lots of benefits, I believe that the other should also be taken into consideration. To put those 2 ideas into practice, we must bring in some legislations in general to not only protect countries but also not to have bad effects in developing economies globally

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