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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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Can someone edite my brieft text
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I'm not a native English speaker so I really need help with a brief text. Could someone who really speaks English help me and fix the mistakes. The text:
Identity theft and phishing are happening now and they are increasing. The target of identity theft or phishing can be a person or a group, familiar or unfa-miliar. In any case phishing causes financial or other damages to a victim. There are billions of users on social media services so the threat really exists. The purpose of this thesis is to examine the connection between identity theft and social media and how the social media services are exploited by the criminals. Identity theft is not criminalised yet in Finland, but by using a fake name a person can commit other acts that are punishable. The research is theory-testing. With the help of hypotheses based on the theory the writer examines how theory meets the real life cases. Because the theory focuses on scientific material about Facebook and Twitter it is presumable that those services are exploited in the cases too. The research points that crimes can be committed on Facebook and Twitter but there are also other social media services. Creating fake profiles is easy and does not require technical skills. Criminals exploit easy methods to phish and theft a victim’s identity. The trust has a big role but it varies depending on the case. The social media as a crime scene is a challenge for the investigation, because the servers are abroad. This research gives a review to common and well-known phishing methods and identity theft. It points how easy it is to impersonate other person. It also describes what kinds of crimes have been committed in Finland.
I'm not a native English speaker so I really need help with a brief text. Could someone who really speaks English help me and fix the mistakes. The text:
Identity theft and phishing are happening now and they are increasing. The target of identity theft or phishing can be a person or a group, familiar or unfa-miliar. In any case phishing causes financial or other damages to a victim. There are billions of users on social media services so the threat really exists. The purpose of this thesis is to examine the connection between identity theft and social media and how the social media services are exploited by the criminals. Identity theft is not criminalised yet in Finland, but by using a fake name a person can commit other acts that are punishable. The research is theory-testing. With the help of hypotheses based on the theory the writer examines how theory meets the real life cases. Because the theory focuses on scientific material about Facebook and Twitter it is presumable that those services are exploited in the cases too. The research points that crimes can be committed on Facebook and Twitter but there are also other social media services. Creating fake profiles is easy and does not require technical skills. Criminals exploit easy methods to phish and theft a victim’s identity. The trust has a big role but it varies depending on the case. The social media as a crime scene is a challenge for the investigation, because the servers are abroad. This research gives a review to common and well-known phishing methods and identity theft. It points how easy it is to impersonate other person. It also describes what kinds of crimes have been committed in Finland.
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I like the article. Suggestions: “unfa-miliar’ should be ‘unfamiliar’. Comma before “so the threat…”.
- I like the article.
- Suggestions: “unfa-miliar’ should be ‘unfamiliar’.
- Comma before “so the threat…”.
- ”.
- Change comma to semi-colon before “but by using…”; and add a comma after “fake name,”.
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I like the article. Suggestions:
“unfa-miliar’ should be ‘unfamiliar’. Comma before “so the threat…”. Comma before “and how..”.
Change comma to semi-colon before “but by using…”; and add a comma after “fake name,”.
Comma after “on the theory”. Comma after “Twitter”. Add a word (maybe “out”) after “points”. Comma after “Twitter”. Replace “theft” (used as a verb) with “steal a vic
“unfa-miliar’ should be ‘unfamiliar’. Comma before “so the threat…”. Comma before “and how..”.
Change comma to semi-colon before “but by using…”; and add a comma after “fake name,”.
Comma after “on the theory”. Comma after “Twitter”. Add a word (maybe “out”) after “points”. Comma after “Twitter”. Replace “theft” (used as a verb) with “steal a vic
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Wilpeter has offered you some English edits.
I'm not sure if you also want comments on the structure of your text. Frankly, it doesn't give me a clear sense of what you are researching and why, or of how you are doing it. For example, sometimes you speak of identity theft and phishing as two separate things, but at other times you speak as if identity theft includes phishing. Do you want
I'm not sure if you also want comments on the structure of your text. Frankly, it doesn't give me a clear sense of what you are researching and why, or of how you are doing it. For example, sometimes you speak of identity theft and phishing as two separate things, but at other times you speak as if identity theft includes phishing. Do you want
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Hi,
The text is an abstract of my master's thesis. I'd like to have also an analysis but if you have only time to correct spelling mistakes it's okay too.
The text is an abstract of my master's thesis. I'd like to have also an analysis but if you have only time to correct spelling mistakes it's okay too.
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Here are a few other comments.
Identity theft and phishing are happening now and they are increasing. The target of identity theft or phishing can be a person or a group, familiar or unfa-miliar. In any case phishing causes financial or other damages to a victim. There are billions of users on social media services so the threat really exists. The
Identity theft and phishing are happening now and they are increasing. The target of identity theft or phishing can be a person or a group, familiar or unfa-miliar. In any case phishing causes financial or other damages to a victim. There are billions of users on social media services so the threat really exists. The
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