Can someone correct the grammar errors in this short paragraph.

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Optilang · Accepted Answer

Eighteenth century London was not kind to children. Children during this time had to work as slaves. They were ~~focused~~ made to sweep other people's chimneys. Many of the child workers died from the job due to long work hours and the soot from the chimneys. They had to do a job that most people would not even dream of doing. First, they ~~were focused~~ had to live in parish houses or work houses because their parents could not afford to feed them. They did not want their children to ~~strave~~ starve to death so they would sell them to people would could feed them. The article that I read concluded the same point “Of every 1,000 children born in early 18th-century London, almost half died before the age of 2. Malnutrition, maternal ignorance, bad water, dirty food, poor hygiene and overcrowding all contributed to this extremely high mortality rate. And if an infant did survive, it then faced the perils of childhood - namely malnourishment and ongoing abuse. Many poor children were dispatched to crowded, backbreaking "workhouses" or were apprenticed to tradesmen who used them as unpaid laborers”.

Yankee · Answer

Hi Daden

Optilang's corrections look fine to me.

Anonymous · Answer

instead of "focused" - try "forced"

MrPernickety · Answer

optilang Eighteenth century London was not kind to children. Children during this time had to work as slaves. They were ~~focused~~ made to sweep other people's chimneys. Many of the child workers died from the job due to long work hours and the soot from the chimneys. They had to do a job that most people would not even dream of doing. First, they ~~were focused~~ had to live in parish houses or work houses because their parents could not afford to feed them. They did not want their children to ~~strave~~ starve to death so they would sell them to people who (would/could) feed them. The article that I read concluded the same point “Of every 1,000 children born in early 18th-century London, almost half died before the age of 2. Malnutrition, maternal ignorance, bad water, dirty food, poor hygiene and overcrowding all contributed to this extremely high mortality rate. And if an infant did survive, it then faced the perils of childhood - namely malnourishment and ongoing abuse. Many poor children were dispatched to crowded, backbreaking "workhouses" or were apprenticed to tradesmen who used them as unpaid laborers”.

I hate to be a Mr.Pernickety, but you've missed an insidious error, that somehow or other sneaked into the text.

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Can someone correct the grammar errors in this short paragraph.

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