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Dakoechan Posted 19 years ago
Letter Writing
Can someone correct my motivation letter..?
0 I'm planning to study abroad for my master degree next year, but i want to prepare as soon as posible. this is my first motivation letter, please correct the letter. any suggestion n critic is welcome.some part of my letter is from anon1 post. thx anon1 02 br
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00 "For the past five year, I studied computer science with specialization in multimedia programming in 00 . The goal of my studies was to understanding the fundamental of software programming and software engineering. During studied at the university, I also learned about diverse topic such as computer security, human and computer interaction, and information system analysis. Information system analysis topic is very interesting because we can be fascinated by the power of mathematical and computer treatment of problem. 02 br
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00 My future career aspiration is becoming part of a senior management team, that’s way I want to obtain a Master’s Degree in Computer Science. Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. I believe that management must have a solid understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, of how to guide companies through uncertain changes in with world, political, economical and technological. 02 br
00 There is an old wise word from my country “alah bisa tegal biasa”. It means that we able to do difficult job because we used to do the job. I believe there are no education is complete without experience. Well prepare with a solid understanding of academic principles and fully trained with multiple problems, I can begin my career. 00 00 I will able to adapt and modify the theoretical construct as required in order to meet my company’s needs. With the world political, economic and technologies constantly changing, I believe by obtain a Master’s Degree will provide a necessary background and an opportunity to anticipate and react the world change." 0-
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00 "For the past five year, I studied computer science with specialization in multimedia programming in 00 . The goal of my studies was to understanding the fundamental of software programming and software engineering. During studied at the university, I also learned about diverse topic such as computer security, human and computer interaction, and information system analysis. Information system analysis topic is very interesting because we can be fascinated by the power of mathematical and computer treatment of problem. 02 br
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00 My future career aspiration is becoming part of a senior management team, that’s way I want to obtain a Master’s Degree in Computer Science. Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles. I believe that management must have a solid understanding, supported by a strong academic foundation, of how to guide companies through uncertain changes in with world, political, economical and technological. 02 br
00 There is an old wise word from my country “alah bisa tegal biasa”. It means that we able to do difficult job because we used to do the job. I believe there are no education is complete without experience. Well prepare with a solid understanding of academic principles and fully trained with multiple problems, I can begin my career. 00 00 I will able to adapt and modify the theoretical construct as required in order to meet my company’s needs. With the world political, economic and technologies constantly changing, I believe by obtain a Master’s Degree will provide a necessary background and an opportunity to anticipate and react the world change." 0-
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0 I've made some corrections for you and highlighted some further problems you need to correct. It's not a good idea to take parts from other letters. 02 br 02 br 00 For the past five 01 b 00 years, 02 b 00 I 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 studied computer science with specialization in multimedia programming in (Univ), (country).
- 0 I've made some corrections for you and highlighted some further problems you need to correct.
- It's not a good idea to take parts from other letters.
- 02 br 02 br 00 For the past five 01 b 00 years, 02 b 00 I 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 studied computer science with specialization in multimedia programming in (Univ), (country).
- The goal of my studies was to 01 b 00 understand 02 b 00 the 01 b 00 fundamentals 02 b 00 of software programming and software engineering.
- During 01 b 00 my studies 02 b 00 at the university, I also learned about diverse 01 b 00 topics 02 b 00 such as computer security, human and computer interaction, and information system analysis.
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0 I've made some corrections for you and highlighted some further problems you need to correct. It's not a good idea to take parts from other letters. You university might check to see who has not written an original letter. 02 br
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00 For the past five 01 b 00 years, 02 b 00 I 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 studied computer science with specialization
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00 For the past five 01 b 00 years, 02 b 00 I 01 b 00 have 02 b 00 studied computer science with specialization
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