Can someone correct my letter of motivation for master programme?

Dear Sir or Madam:



My name is Derek and I am writing this letter to apply for the Master's Program in Biology. I am a forth-year student in studying Biological Science. I would like to enroll in the program in order to gain further knowledge and experience toward academic research in this field.



During the last three years, I have learned the basic knowledge of life science, and cultivated my interest in doing scientific research. Besides theoretical knowledge, I mastered various laboratory techniques such as cell culture, ELISA and DNA cloning. I have got an overall GPA 80.6, and a GPA major courses. Guided by some teachers who came back from Europe, America and , I realized that there are more interesting research programmes carrying out abroad. So I decided to move to to start my new life in learning and doing research. My parents are both doctors, and my grandfather and grandmother were doctor and nurse, so I think I was influenced by them a lot and became interested in medical science when I was young. But after I was enrolled in university, I changed my mind and started to focus on the biology because I think my families are all taking care of people and why shouldn’t I do something different. I decided to look into the rules of the natural world especially all kinds of creatures around us. I joint the NGO called “Green Wild” as a volunteer to help people know the importance of a kind of plant which is called mangrove, besides, to improve people’s mind towards pollution, persuading people to care about our living environment. I had showed my leadership during two years’ work in this organization and helped carrying out many activities. This experience enhanced my belief to doing more progress in biological field.



Currently I am doing my graduation thesis which focus on the nitric oxide in plants that represents as a signal messenger. The mechanism of NO in animals has been discovered, however, there is not enough research about NO in plants. I haveacquired advanced and practical knowledge on the plan cell, tissue and organ culture. When working in the lab, I am considered as a courteous and studious student, a light-hearted friend and an enthusiasm co-worker.



Given my interest and experience in the field of biology, I am eager to deepen my knowledge and to specialize in plant science, and furthermore to widen my knowledge in cellular mechanisms involved in signaling. The MSc program offered at your university gives me the opportunity to put my knowledge into a higher standard. This study program particularly attracts me owing to its international environment. Working in a multicultural study group gives me the opportunity to further challenge myself in social aspects which I think will be of great importance for the future career of a scientist in this field. Moreover, I have come to recognize that a deep and solid education provided by your programme is needed for me to pursue my career in plant research. Therefore, if I successfully graduate from this programme and make practical use of what I have learned, I will play an active role in achievements of biological science in my country. Besides, I am eager to continue my research after master’s study and I believe that an international PhD corresponds well with my future plans in seeking a distinguished career in the eminent field of biology.



Thank you for taking the time to consider my application for the master’s programme at your university. I understand that admission to the programme is competitive, but I am also confident that I am qualified and eager, and prepared to meet all of its challenges. I look forward to hearing from you in the near future regarding the success of my application.



Yours faithfully,