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CoSmO_hk Posted 19 years ago
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Can someone correct my grammar, please
0 my grammar is very poor. 02 br
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00 I want to improve my english. 02 br
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00 Can someone help me, please 02 br
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00 thank you very much 02 br
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00 Dear Sir, 02 br
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00 00 As a teenage of 21 years old, I am writing to share my view on abusing drug. I think that this problem has become worse and worse. I totally disagree with teenage abusing drugs because it will bring a great harm to their internal body. 02 br
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00 00 First of all, teenage is very curious to abuse drugs, one of the reasons is that they always saw a role abusing drug in films. Besides, some peer would lure them to abuse drugs, and would say that abusing drug has many advantages and the harm is weaker than you has supposed and advertisement content. Finally, teenage abusing drugs, in order to reduce the pressure from academic studies or family. 02 br
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00 00 Parents should build a correct concept for their children, and tell them that drug abuse has a great harm to the future. In addition, abusing drug only is to shirk a responsibility, instead of relieving pressure. There are many ways for relieving pressure, such as hiking, swimming. Furthermore, drug abuse is illegal, and which it may waste a lot of money and it may even cause penalty or imprisonment. 02 br
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00 00 I have some suggestions mentioned as follows. Firstly, the government should patrol intensively in all entertainment places. Secondly, the government should cooperate closely with mainland authorities for seizing drug dealer. For example, police can pose as buyer. Thirdly, the government should impose heavier punishment. Finally, family, schools and the government must join hands to deal with this serious problem. Schools and the government should organize regularly activities about harms of abusing drug and add drug abuse in major subject. Parents also should take more time to teach their children and tell them the truth. 02 br
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00 00 I have not ever been drug abusers. But I have some experience for drug abusers because I have some friends who are drug abusers. I have seen someone to vomit constantly in several hours, he became thin and turned pale. Moreover, he lost a fortune and loaned a lot of money from banks, he has abused drug for above a year. So far, he has been abusing drug, though abusing less than before. I advise him, but he always said that this was his business and he did not indulge in abusing drugs. So I hope teenage do not try to abuse drugs anymore, otherwise it will bring a great harm to you. 02 br
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00 Yours faithfully, 02 br
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00 Peter 0-
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00 I want to improve my english. 02 br
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00 Can someone help me, please 02 br
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00 thank you very much 02 br
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00 Dear Sir, 02 br
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00 00 As a teenage of 21 years old, I am writing to share my view on abusing drug. I think that this problem has become worse and worse. I totally disagree with teenage abusing drugs because it will bring a great harm to their internal body. 02 br
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00 00 First of all, teenage is very curious to abuse drugs, one of the reasons is that they always saw a role abusing drug in films. Besides, some peer would lure them to abuse drugs, and would say that abusing drug has many advantages and the harm is weaker than you has supposed and advertisement content. Finally, teenage abusing drugs, in order to reduce the pressure from academic studies or family. 02 br
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00 00 Parents should build a correct concept for their children, and tell them that drug abuse has a great harm to the future. In addition, abusing drug only is to shirk a responsibility, instead of relieving pressure. There are many ways for relieving pressure, such as hiking, swimming. Furthermore, drug abuse is illegal, and which it may waste a lot of money and it may even cause penalty or imprisonment. 02 br
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00 00 I have some suggestions mentioned as follows. Firstly, the government should patrol intensively in all entertainment places. Secondly, the government should cooperate closely with mainland authorities for seizing drug dealer. For example, police can pose as buyer. Thirdly, the government should impose heavier punishment. Finally, family, schools and the government must join hands to deal with this serious problem. Schools and the government should organize regularly activities about harms of abusing drug and add drug abuse in major subject. Parents also should take more time to teach their children and tell them the truth. 02 br
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00 00 I have not ever been drug abusers. But I have some experience for drug abusers because I have some friends who are drug abusers. I have seen someone to vomit constantly in several hours, he became thin and turned pale. Moreover, he lost a fortune and loaned a lot of money from banks, he has abused drug for above a year. So far, he has been abusing drug, though abusing less than before. I advise him, but he always said that this was his business and he did not indulge in abusing drugs. So I hope teenage do not try to abuse drugs anymore, otherwise it will bring a great harm to you. 02 br
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00 Yours faithfully, 02 br
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00 Peter 0-
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0 Bolded some glaring errors for you. 01 blockquote 01 cite 10 CoSmO_hk 12 cite 12 br 10 Dear Sir, 12 br 12 br 10 10 As a 11 b 10 teenage 11 i 11 u 10 r 12 u 12 i 12 b 10 (no longer a teenager) of 21 years old, I am writing to share my view on drug 11 b 11 u 10 abuse 12 u 12 b 10 . I think that this problem has become worse and worse.
- 0 Bolded some glaring errors for you.
- 01 blockquote 01 cite 10 CoSmO_hk 12 cite 12 br 10 Dear Sir, 12 br 12 br 10 10 As a 11 b 10 teenage 11 i 11 u 10 r 12 u 12 i 12 b 10 (no longer a teenager) of 21 years old, I am writing to share my view on drug 11 b 11 u 10 abuse 12 u 12 b 10 .
- I think that this problem has become worse and worse.
- 12 br 12 br 10 10 First of all, 11 b 10 teenage is 12 b 10 very curious to 11 b 10 abuse 12 b 10 drugs 10 , 10 one of the reasons is that they always 11 b 10 saw a role abusing drug 12 b 10 in films.
- Besides, some 11 b 10 peer 12 b 10 would lure them 11 b 10 to abuse 12 b 10 drugs, and would say that 11 b 10 abusing drug has many advantages 12 b 10 and 11 b 10 the harm is weaker 12 b 10 than you ha 11 b 10 s 12 b 10 supposed and 11 b 10 advertisement 12 b 10 11 b 10 content 12 b 10 .
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01 cite 10 Julielai 12 cite 10 Bolded some glaring errors for you. 11 blockquote11 cite 20 CoSmO_hk 22 cite 22 br
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20 20 As a 21 b 20 teenage 21 i 21 u 20 r 22 u 22 i 22 b 20 (no longer a teenager) of 21 years old, I
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