can someone comment please?

the war I always dread
I sit alone in fear,
Wondering !
Weather or not the war is near.
Yet I have not shed a single tear,
Just sat alone,
Dreading the moment ,
The war gets here,

Dark grey sky’s are approaching
I hear children screaming
Ever body’s fearing
The sirens blazing from the distance
Boom !
Boom!
The war is here.

The sky is red
Everyone scattered from there beds
Hope they find nobody dead.
Boom! Boom!
The sky’s blood red

I ran and ran as fast as I could
As my legs would
Out to the shelter
that’s were I will go
To get away from this dread full show

In the shelter I will be safe
Away from the bombing
This is where I think I will stay
Until this war goes a way
And wish for a brighter day

I will go to sleep Will not peep
What I will do.

I sit a lone in fear Have shed so many a tear
People sit in fear.
Of this war that’s hear.

Boom!
Boom!
Rattle of the shelters roof

I am scared
This is something I always dread
Wish I was tucked up at home in my bed.