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Neiltucker Posted 17 years ago
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Can somebody proofread please

Hi my name is Cornelius Tucker from Pittsburgh PA. The reason I would like to attend Lincoln University is because I think it will lead me in the right path in my life. Lincoln seems like a very social school. The other school I visit I really didn't feel that way it felt like they just want people in there school just for the money. It seem like Lincoln university wants to help you every step of the way to try to improve your self for the future. I really want to attend Lincoln to see what career I want to do for the rest of my life and be happy doing it. The other reason I want to attend Lincoln University is to experience the college experience and to be around people that want to do something in their life. Also I think I will do way better in college because I will be learning something I will get paid for in the future. The other reason I would like to attend Lincoln university is to get a better experience of the career I would to for the rest of my life.
  

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Welcome to the Forums, Neil! I have made a few suggestions on your letter. g the word "experience" All the best, A- s Hi my name is Cornelius Tucker from Pittsburgh PA.

  • Welcome to the Forums, Neil!
  • I have made a few suggestions on your letter.
  • g the word "experience" All the best, A- s Hi my name is Cornelius Tucker from Pittsburgh PA.
  • The reason I would like to attend Lincoln University is because I think it will lead me on the right path in my life.
  • Lincoln seems like a very social school.
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Welcome to the Forums, Neil!
I have made a few suggestions on your letter. You might think about a way to rephrase some of the sentences to avoid repetition, e.g the word "experience"

All the best,
A-

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