Can somebody proofread my motivation letter?

Admission office

Date: 30/10/14


Subject: Motivation letter

With this letter I wish to apply and state my motivation for entrance to the Master program in XY at the University of xy for the 2014/15 academic year.

I have chosen this University as my first choice because of the outstanding educational system, focus on interdisciplinary subject and work experience. Furthermore is the only one which offers a balanced program combining economics and tourism in a master’s degree.
I find this program would be a solid step towards my future career as a student who understands and appreciates international studies and economic. My ultimate career idea is to hold a position in event managing or in a tourism company.

I am a recent graduate from University of Xyz, where I earned a degree in Foreign Languages and Modern Culture with a (first class degree).
My passion for international environment and foreign languages comes from my childhood,
since I had the first exchange at the age of 12. Then in the last year of middle school I spent a trimester attending the College Saint-Coeur in Dijon while I was hosted by a native family.
Anyhow, the most precious experience was during the 3rd year of university when I was selected as an exchange student in Portugal so I spent 8 months studying at University of xyz. Beside I had to possibility to study philology or linguistic science, I choose as main subjects Journalism and Web Marketing with the purpose to develop my communication and ITT skill.
I also had the possibility to improve my language skills, since lectures were in English or Portuguese and, along the labs and extra curricular activities, I learnt HTML code and CSS design.

My interest in Intercultural and tourism studies is also determined by the fact that I was born and raised in Xyz, a city well known for the touristic tradition.
Since hight school I used to worked in the Grand Hotel Bauer-Monaco as a waiter and costumer care assistant.
Moreover I have the chance to serve in several kermesses and exhibitions in xyz, first as not qualificated employee, then I became a Staff Supervisor in 2013. Currently I manage a team of 12 people, which covers a wide range ages, tasks and responsibilities.
It has been a key experience when I organized
What I learnt on the previous experiences has been useful during the organizing of Ph.D summer school, that I organized as professor's assistant. This meeting aimed to be a meetingpoint for professors and Ph.Ds from the academic world, who aims to make discuss expert from different background.

After I read carefully the course requirements, I find that it matches perfectly my interests and profile. In the University website, I gained all information i needed about the University campus and organization of study.
As I understand, this program is very competitive, but I am convinced that my good record at the University and professional experience give me a strong recommendation for a place at it. Furthermore, my international background and interdisciplinary education will add more diversity to your program.
In the same time I am aware of possible challenges and high investments of effort I will have to place in order to successfully complete this course.

Sincerely,

Xy