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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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can somebody please help me?
Hello I need some help with my cover letter! I'm not a native English speaker and would be glad if someone could check my cover letter for mistakes and maybe give me some advice if there are any sentences that don't sound good and need to be written differently.
''Dear Madam/Sir,
I graduated from school last summer and I want to apply for admission to your university. After I had seen your announcment in the newspaper I decided to visit your webpage and learn more about your institution. I came to the conclusion that the course 'EXERCISE AND SPORTS SCIENCE – HUMAN MOVEMENT (B.Sc.)' perfectly fits my interests.
I am a keen sports person and have throughout the past few years tried to improve my movement patterns and physical performance. Through personal research I have learned how important these patterns are and that regular exercise is essential to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Everybody should experience how wonderful it is to engage in physical activity but unfortunately there are a lot of people that are unable to do so. I realised that in order to deepen my understanding of the human body and be able to help others I need to apply to your unsiversity.
I am certain that I have what it takes to be a human movement specialist because I am highly motivated, enjoy physical activity and helping other people improve their motor skills and I want to take my education to a new level.
Respectfully,''
''Dear Madam/Sir,
I graduated from school last summer and I want to apply for admission to your university. After I had seen your announcment in the newspaper I decided to visit your webpage and learn more about your institution. I came to the conclusion that the course 'EXERCISE AND SPORTS SCIENCE – HUMAN MOVEMENT (B.Sc.)' perfectly fits my interests.
I am a keen sports person and have throughout the past few years tried to improve my movement patterns and physical performance. Through personal research I have learned how important these patterns are and that regular exercise is essential to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Everybody should experience how wonderful it is to engage in physical activity but unfortunately there are a lot of people that are unable to do so. I realised that in order to deepen my understanding of the human body and be able to help others I need to apply to your unsiversity.
I am certain that I have what it takes to be a human movement specialist because I am highly motivated, enjoy physical activity and helping other people improve their motor skills and I want to take my education to a new level.
Respectfully,''
Top answer
'Dear Madam/Sir, I graduated from school last summer and I want ("want" is quite abrupt and forceful. ) to apply for admission to your university. ) and learn more about your institution.
- 'Dear Madam/Sir, I graduated from school last summer and I want ("want" is quite abrupt and forceful.
- ) to apply for admission to your university.
- ) and learn more about your institution.
- )' (Don't use all caps.
- ) perfectly fits my interests.
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'Dear Madam/Sir,
I graduated from school last summer and I want ("want" is quite abrupt and forceful. "Would like" is more polite.) to apply for admission to your university. After I had seen your announcment in the newspaper , I decided to visit your webpage (web site?) and learn more about your institution. I came to th
I graduated from school last summer and I want ("want" is quite abrupt and forceful. "Would like" is more polite.) to apply for admission to your university. After I had seen your announcment in the newspaper , I decided to visit your webpage (web site?) and learn more about your institution. I came to th
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