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Topic: Effects of smart devices on our daily lives

Smart devices play an important role in our daily lives, which brings numerous benefits to us but also contains several drawbacks.

Generally, smart devices will certainly bring about a myriad of advantages. First of all, they have considered the quickest means of communication in today’s society. Unlike previous life when people communicate with each other by making use of pigeons or post office for letter delivery, the modern devices allow people to contact easily with our friends or relatives wherever by calling or sending messages in a short time. For example, only with a mobile phone, a simple object in our pocket, we can be able to reach our family and friends around the world in about 10 seconds. With the assistance of smart devices, the educational backgrounds also significantly make improvements. This is because smart devices often connect to the Internet containing useful information sources such as study material, and texts of higher institutions. This will make smart devices perfect for learning and self-education. On the other hand, a lot of negative effects of smart devices like laptops, automobiles are also there in many aspects. To begin with, along with their fastest speed, they have caused people to become more impersonal with each other. People will only focus on their work on those smart devices rather than face-to-face interaction by presenting in some events such as on the bus, in the par. We can take the use of laptops as an example. People just do work at home and then send them via email without going to the company, which results in ineffective work because of the lack of direct interaction. In addition, as for the consumption of smart devices, it also leads to health problems, especially physical health. To put more specific, our backs and eyes are affected by the use of high-tech equipment, namely myopic, backache, migraines.

In conclusion, although smart devices are indispensable in our lives, they still possess both advantages and disadvantages effects.

  

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Smart devices play an important role in our daily lives, and bring which brings numerous benefits to us but also while truly they contain several drawbacks. I think that which should not be used in here. It is not clear to indicate which is what.

  • Smart devices play an important role in our daily lives, and bring which brings numerous benefits to us but also while truly they contain several drawbacks.
  • I think that which should not be used in here.
  • It is not clear to indicate which is what.
  • If it is "smart devices", the verb "brings" should be "bring" The next part of this sentence is telling a contradictory idea so, I suggest we use while instead of "but also".
  • Generally, smart devices will certainly bring about a myriad of advantages.
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Smart devices play an important role in our daily lives, and bring which brings numerous benefits to us but also while truly they contain several drawbacks.

I think that which should not be used in here. It is not clear to indicate which is what. If it is "smart devices", the verb

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