can anyone help to organize and re format some of the sentances

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I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization to response to humanitarian crisis which Europe is currently facing the greatest refugees crisis since the Second World War and to help refugees because I have extensive experience within this field.

My most recent participation were involved in the initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme with
UAE Red Cross in Abril/Kurdistan regain/North of Iraq, Supervising the site activities, which the liaising of all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representable.

I was working as an Architect and KRG representative, responsibilities included pre project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.

During the previous period in Dover/UK, I was working with the council including supporting strategies to co-ordinate and tackle the refugee needs, from this I gained very good experience in supervision, Valuable experience was gained especially with regard the immigration and regulations with refugee status.

I am a hardworking and enthusiastic who want to help and support the refugees crises whilst you will benefit from my experiences as a result of working on a wide variety of projects in various different countries and my native language skills
Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish and English.

I would like to gain all necessary experiences from your long established organization and enhance my immigration knowledge.

Michael Chambers Teaching English · Accepted Answer

Dear Hamradesh

It's a very good letter but there are a few mistakes. When I was reading it, I thought that you had a lot of relevant experience and that you could apply for specific advertised posts. Obviously, speculative letters are only occasionally successful in securing interviews. My guess is that the organisations you would be sending this letter to are likely to have a clear and open recruitment process. Perhaps some accept speculative letters and keep them on file.

What I am saying is that your time might be better spent applying for specific posts. I may be wrong so please forgive me if so - it's just an opinion from 20 years of working in England.

There is an art to a very good covering letter for specific posts and you are on the right tracks. I'd be happy to give more feedback on this letter on this forum, or even better, on a covering letter for a specific job application. For the latter, you would need to post the job specification.

I'll be back online tomorrow morning and will check for a reply.

Kind regards

Michael

Hamadresh · Answer

Dear Michael,
i really appreciate your time and effort to look at my covering letter as such details, you are absolutely correct I should apply specify to the post that been advertised however, this is not the case and in the mean time I don't know what their requirement, that is why I have an open letter. you are welcome to add or delete some phrases or if you can correct some mistakes or re-format.

Michael Chambers Teaching English · Answer

Dear hamadresh

Here is my corrected letter with some thoughts at the bottom.

I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization which help refugees, and in response to the current humanitarian refugee crisis which is the greatest Europe has faced since the Second World War; I have extensive experience within this field.

In my most recent role as an Architect and KRG representative with the UAE Red Cross, my duties included the following:

the initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme in the Abril/Kurdistan region in the north of Iraq

supervising site activities, including liaising with all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representative

pre-project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.

Prior to this role, I worked with the local council / municipality in Dover, UK. My duties included supporting [explain?] strategies to co-ordinate and tackle the needs of refugees; from this, I gained very good experience in supervision [of what?]. In this role, I gained valuable experience especially with regard to immigration procedures and laws applicable to refugees.

I am a hardworking and enthusiastic who want to help and support the refugees crises whilst you will benefit from my experiences as a result of working on a wide variety of projects in various different countries

[maybe above paragraph not necessary as repeats?]

I am a native speaker of Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish [check this] and have a professional proficiency in English [any certificates proving level?].

I would like to work with your organization and so gain further experience and knowledge in the field of providing facilities to support refugees and other immigrants.

I recommend you attach your CV / resume and refer to it in this letter. Perhaps you should add details of the periods you worked in the two roles you mention. Mention your architecture qualification. If you have the right to live and / or work in the countries where the companies are based, I would also mention this.

All the best, Michael

Hamadresh · Answer

I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization which help refugees, and in response to the current humanitarian refugee crisis which Europe is currently facing the greatest refugees crisis since the Second World War ; I have extensive experience within this field. and to help refugees because I have extensive experience within this field.
In my most recent role as a coordinator with UAE Red Cross my duties included the following: The initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme in the Abril/Kurdistan region in the north of Iraq supervising site activities, including liaising with all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representative pre-project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.
Prior to this role, I worked with the local council / municipality in Dover, UK. My duties included supporting and providing care for all isolated vulnerable individuals, especially unaccompanied minors in translate their needs and Establish communication links with the refugees to ensure good two-way communication between the refugees and those assisting them.
I am a hardworking and enthusiastic who want to help and support the refugee crises whilst you will benefit from my experiences as a result of working on a wide variety of projects in various different countries. I am a native speaker of Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish and have a professional proficiency in English.
I would like to work with your long established organization and gain further experience and enhance my knowledge in the field of providing facilities to support refugees and other immigrants.

Hamadresh · Answer

I believe this is good covering letter, thank you for your help and support...please have a final look and feel free to correct any words or phrase that you think is necessary to change..regards

AlpheccaStars · Answer

I am interested in applying for any positions (Be more specific - "any" is too broad) in your organization in response to the humanitarian crisis in Europe. ~~is currently facing the greatest refugees crisis since the Second World War and to help refugees because~~ I have extensive experience within this field.

My most recent participation was involved in the initial design and co- ordination of the Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing ~~scheme~~ with the UAE Red Cross in the Abril/Kurdistan region of Iraq, I supervised all on-site activities, ~~which the liaising of all other parties~~ including the UAE Red Cross representatives.

I worked as an architect and KRG representative. My responsibilities included pre-project studies and site investigation and approval of the Kazir Camp west of Arbil.

~~During the previous period~~ In 20XX, I lived in Dover, UK, and worked with the city council developing ~~including~~ ~~supporting~~ strategies to co-ordinate ~~and tackle the~~ refugee needs, and from this I gained very good experience as a manager, ~~supervision, Valuable experience was gained~~ especially with regard to ~~the~~ immigration and regulations concerning refugees and refugee status.

I am a hardworking and enthusiastic man/woman who wants to help and support the refugees in their time of crises. You will benefit from my experiences ~~as a result of~~ working on a wide variety of projects in ~~various~~ different countries and my native language skills: Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish and English.

I would like to gain ~~all necessary~~ experience by working in ~~from~~ your long-established organization and enhance my knowledge in international immigration .

Hamadresh · Answer

Thank you very much for your time and help, I appreciate if you double check again the revised letter in the light of your comments ......Many regards
I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization which help refugees, and in response to the current humanitarian refugee crisis which Europe is currently facing the greatest refugees crisis since the Second World War ; I have extensive experience within this field. and to help refugees because I have extensive experience within this field.
In my most recent role as a coordinator with UAE Red Cross my duties included the following: The initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme in the Abril/Kurdistan region in the north of Iraq supervising site activities, including liaising with all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representative pre-project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.
Prior to this role, I worked with the local council / municipality in Dover, UK. My duties included supporting and providing care for all isolated vulnerable individuals, especially unaccompanied minors in translate their needs and Establish communication links with the refugees to ensure good two-way communication between the refugees and those assisting them.
I am a hardworking and enthusiastic who want to help and support the refugee crises whilst you will benefit from my experiences as a result of working on a wide variety of projects in various different countries. I am a native speaker of Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish and have a professional proficiency in English.
I would like to work with your long established organization and gain further experience and enhance my knowledge in the field of providing facilities to support refugees and other immigrants.

I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization which help refugees, and in response to the current humanitarian refugee crisis which Europe is currently facing the greatest refugees crisis since the Second World War ; I have extensive experience within this field. and to help refugees because I have extensive experience within this field.
In my most recent role as a coordinator with UAE Red Cross my duties included the following: The initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme in the Abril/Kurdistan region in the north of Iraq supervising site activities, including liaising with all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representative pre-project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.
Prior to this role, I worked with the local council / municipality in Dover, UK. My duties included supporting and providing care for all isolated vulnerable individuals, especially unaccompanied minors in translate their needs and Establish communication links with the refugees to ensure good two-way communication between the refugees and those assisting them.
I am a hardworking and enthusiastic who want to help and support the refugee crises whilst you will benefit from my experiences as a result of working on a wide variety of projects in various different countries. I am a native speaker of Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish and have a professional proficiency in English.
I would like to work with your long established organization and gain further experience and enhance my knowledge in the field of providing facilities to support refugees and other immigrants.

Michael Chambers Teaching English · Answer

I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization which help refugees, and in response to the current humanitarian refugee crisis in Europe which is the greatest refugees crisis faced since the Second World War ; I have extensive experience within this field. In my most recent role as a coordinator with UAE Red Cross, my duties included the following:

the initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme in the Abril/Kurdistan region in the north of tIraq;

supervising site activities, including liaising with all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representative; and

pre-project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.

Prior to this role, I worked with the local council / municipality in Dover, UK. My duties included supporting and providing care to all isolated vulnerable individuals, especially unaccompanied minors; I translated for them and established communication links with the refugees to ensure good two-way communication between the refugees and those assisting them.

I am a hardworking and enthusiastic who wants to tackle the refugee crisis and help refugees. You would benefit from my experience gained from a wide variety of projects in various different countries.

I am a native speaker of Kurdish/Arabic/Persian/Turkish and have a professional proficiency in English.

I would like to work with your long established organization and gain further experience and enhance my knowledge in the field of providing facilities to support refugees and other immigrants.

Hope this is OK. All the best, Michael

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Your sentences are still too run-on.
Do not use semicolons to separate sentences. Use full stops.
You have many grammatical errors. It is difficult to parse. See my last post.

I am interested in applying for any positions in your organization which help refugees, and in response to the current humanitarian refugee crisis which Europe is currently facing— the greatest refugees crisis since the Second World War ; I have extensive experience within this field. and to help refugees because I have extensive experience within this field.
In my most recent role as a coordinator with UAE Red Cross my duties included the following:(I expect a list here. I have difficulty in figuring out the items in the list - it's just one long garbled sentence) First, the initial design and co- ordination of Bahraka Refugee Camp and residential housing scheme in the Abril/Kurdistan region in the north of Iraq (Is this a second duty?) supervising site activities, including liaising with all other parties including the UAE Red Cross representative pre-project study and site investigation and approval of Kazir Camp west of Arbil.

can anyone help to organize and re format some of the sentances

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