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Pbradley Posted 17 years ago
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Can anyone give me feedback on this personal statement? I'd be very grateful.


Anyone can write, but the ability to write and influence others is a powerful tool. For this reason Journalism is a subject I have long been intrigued in, it's a great way of presenting facts and expressing opinions. It's power is such that it can persuade it's audience towards the writers way of thinking.I first became interested in writing during school English Lessons, our teacher would allow us to write short stories using our imagination. I found improvised writing liberated my mind and helped me escape the stress of dreaded Maths Lessons.
My hobbies include Football, Music, Playing Guitar, Socialising, Reading Books and Newspapers. I usually read 3 Newspapers a day and especially enjoy reading the columnist pages, mainly for their controversy. A few of my favourite columnists include Tony Parsons, Paul Routledge and Sue Carrol. I admire them for boldly expressing their views and having to face the angry torrent of e-mails. However like most men my favourite page is the sports one. I love to play, watch and read abut Football, next to work it takes up half of my life. I play for a Sunday League team and take turns to write the match reports on the club website. Others in the team see this as a chore, but I love doing it.
I'm currently working in a Law firm where i started as Office Junior. I gradually progressed into the Accounts Department and now hold an important roll in the Management Accounts team. I have completed NVQ 3 in Business Administration and the Intermediate level of my Accounting course. Whilst I enjoy my job I'm pushing for a spontaneous and exciting career that I have a passion for. I have a broad general knowledge stemming from my interest in Newspapers and Media, and strong analytical skills from my role in Accounting and my time serving on the Jury. I've also been offered a weeks work experience with a Newspaper firm in February, where I hope to pick up a valuable insight into Journalism.
I want to go to University to better myself and gain a qualification I can be proud of. I crave a career in Journalism and want to gain the best possible knowledge on route. I have the enthusiasm and drive to succeed and influence those around me. If selected for the course I look forward to an exciting new experience and hope to meet some fantastic people along the way

  

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Hello pbradley: Welcome to the forum. I have made a few suggestions on your essay. pbradley Anyone can write, but the ability to write and influence others is a powerful tool.

  • Hello pbradley: Welcome to the forum.
  • I have made a few suggestions on your essay.
  • pbradley Anyone can write, but the ability to write and influence others is a powerful tool.
  • For this reason , Journalism is a subject I have long been intrigued in .
  • I t's a great way of presenting facts and expressing opinions.
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Hello pbradley:
Welcome to the forum. I have made a few suggestions on your essay.
pbradley
Anyone can write, but the ability to write and influence others is a powerful tool. For this reason, Journalism is a subject I have long been intrigued in. It's a great way of presenting facts and expressing opinions. Its power is such that it can pers
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Thats great, thanks for taking the time
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Can anyone give any feedback, as in what they think of the statement please?

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