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This commercial depicts the impact of domestic violence. The setting is of a "tea-party" and ends with a conflict between a boy and a girl. Although it never shows either child's face, you can conclude they are in fact kids because they are wearing dress shoes that are five sizes too big. One day they will fill those shoes, however, its goal is to show how this type of behavior is developed long before one can actually fit into "grown-up" shoes or embody all the physical characteristics of an adult. It is mainly geared towards adults, parents in particular and uses children as the medium to show how domestic violence between adults does have a significant and lasting impact it has on your children. Since kids learn their social skills from an early age, it's attempting to show that you as parents can stop the cycle. This, I believe is a savvy attempt to tug at one's emotions by showing how children mimic the actions of their parents and not all imitations are cute and pleasant. The main point of this particular commercial is to promote social change through preventing a child to ever be exposed to the acts of domestic violence.
I found this to be one of the most effective commercials against violence because it uses children as the medium to end domestic violence. All behavior is learned behavior and children learn most during their developmental years which most of that time is spent inside the home with their parents'. With this being said, the most direct way to get the attention of adults and parents alike is to involve children. It is a compelling and effective way to promote anti-domestic violence and should have a last effect on the viewer. The only way to break this cycle is to lead by a positive example for the sake of your children.