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Can anyone check this short story please ?
I am ,asian student, prepared my self to take an IELTS examination. Please read this story . I need your comment and grammar check.
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Governments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health.
To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opinion?
These days, almost countries around the world are in globalisation era. Most of them are competing in order to invest in the developing inventions and technologies for money, but they does not pay enough budget for citizens health. There are some agreements on this topic but some disagreements too.
First of all, one agreement for government should pay more budget in health segments is that their citizens deserve to get better quality of life ; doctors and scientists should have a chance to develop the basis knowledgement of human need such as brand - new medicines, recent vaccination and organ transplantation etc. For instance, there would be neccessary to improving and finding antiretroviral drugs for HIV infected patients quickly. As a result of concerning in human being, paying more budget in health research would improve human health.
Apart from above, space programs may be the nearest future of humanity. For example , we sent sattlelite to promoting our convenient lives such as, communicating overseas, knowing the latest current news from others continent and agreeing overseas commercial. As well as this , we sent space crafts and astronaut to explore the space to finding a new place to live, an ore to create engine and new source of gasoline and energy. Consequently, human would have better comfortable life than 20 years ago because of these technologies.
However, the space programs have many advantages for human but it consume enormous of money and if we cannot find anything from outer space; we may be waste it up. Besides, the developed country ,which have plenty of money, should play an important role to helping the developing countries for public benefits.
In conclusion, even the space programs advance a major benefit for almost people and trader around the world ; new hope for humanity for another sattlements. I think that improving in human basis requirement such as human health , have more fascinating advantages for investment.
Task 2
Governments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs. This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health.
To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opinion?
These days, almost countries around the world are in globalisation era. Most of them are competing in order to invest in the developing inventions and technologies for money, but they does not pay enough budget for citizens health. There are some agreements on this topic but some disagreements too.
First of all, one agreement for government should pay more budget in health segments is that their citizens deserve to get better quality of life ; doctors and scientists should have a chance to develop the basis knowledgement of human need such as brand - new medicines, recent vaccination and organ transplantation etc. For instance, there would be neccessary to improving and finding antiretroviral drugs for HIV infected patients quickly. As a result of concerning in human being, paying more budget in health research would improve human health.
Apart from above, space programs may be the nearest future of humanity. For example , we sent sattlelite to promoting our convenient lives such as, communicating overseas, knowing the latest current news from others continent and agreeing overseas commercial. As well as this , we sent space crafts and astronaut to explore the space to finding a new place to live, an ore to create engine and new source of gasoline and energy. Consequently, human would have better comfortable life than 20 years ago because of these technologies.
However, the space programs have many advantages for human but it consume enormous of money and if we cannot find anything from outer space; we may be waste it up. Besides, the developed country ,which have plenty of money, should play an important role to helping the developing countries for public benefits.
In conclusion, even the space programs advance a major benefit for almost people and trader around the world ; new hope for humanity for another sattlements. I think that improving in human basis requirement such as human health , have more fascinating advantages for investment.
Top answer
( to support space programs) This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health. (It would be better if this money were spent on researches on improving human health) To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opinion? ( These days almost all countries around the world are in a time of globalisation.
- ( to support space programs) This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health.
- (It would be better if this money were spent on researches on improving human health) To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opinion?
- ( These days almost all countries around the world are in a time of globalisation.
- ) but they does not pay enough budget for citizens health.
- ) doctors and scientists should have a chance to develop the basis knowledgement of human need such as brand - new medicines, recent vaccination and organ transplantation etc.
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Governments around the world are spending billions in support of space programs.(to support space programs) This money would be better spent on research into improvements in human health.(It would be better if this money were spent on researches on improving human health)
To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opini
To what extent do you agree or disgree with this opini
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