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Tile silver 561 Posted 9 years ago

Can anybody polish this writing?

Ninja mask highlighting his eyes
Incredibly beautiful guise
The kind you could get lost in;
A Voice from helmet head
Want a ride ?
Without a second thought, I abide
Never knew that was my first and last
It's a ride for life
I covered my free head
With unjewelled crown
Strapped under chin
Backseat of his bike
Gripped his sides tight
With my knees
Pulling me right away
He swift like a flash
Disappearing with
Damn Godspeed
Wind pushing me away
His fluttering fingers on the clutch
Playing numbers from 1- 6
zipping through jammed roads
It's Bangalore of course
faster and faster
Adrenaline rush attained
Breeze slapping my face
Closes my eyes
I'm on the roller coast for the very second
Flowing over a series of sweeping bends
Leaning as bikes go by
My head too close to the bus at the bend
Blending with the wind
Zipping through vehicles
Trying to roll with the flow of his riding style
Impressed to know
Is brain being quicker than my vision
It was a kick ass ride ever
With heavy rain
Still the speed didn't go down
I wanna re-live that moment
It's a date for any biker
He becomes partially blind
Whenever I'm near
His first spectacles lost
It's the beginning
I, be jinx to him
God be jilt for us
Slashing into night
On the nice road
He dropped down the gear
To stop aside
Something made him think
To see me ride
It was an empty road
Silence across
Machine roars while I ride
Hrum hrum hrum
Hear the beat
We switched over after some miles
As we hit the busy city
He bends over front
Whenever he drops the gear
To slow down
Never ever have i met
Such a gentle guy
As he falls front
My heart fall for his kind
To once more ride behind you
Would be the dream come true
I know we 'll ride again and again
Let Shiva show you mercy soon.
  

Top answer

It needs more than a polish; it needs an overhaul. Start again and shorten it by half.

  • It needs more than a polish; it needs an overhaul.
  • Start again and shorten it by half.
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It needs more than a polish; it needs an overhaul. Start again and shorten it by half.

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