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Rachel1500 Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

can anybody correct my review!!!!

0Dear all ,02br
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00In the Movie, Julie Andrews lights up the screen as Maria,02br
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00She is a spirited young woman who leaves the convent to become governess to the seven children of Captain Von Trapp, He is a widower whose strict household rules leave no room for music. 02br
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00He doesn't like music.When Maria arrived the house she was singing all the time and trained to the seven Children. 02br
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00Captain Von Trapp thought what she couldn't follow the rules of his house.02br
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00One day, he played the guitar and sing a song before his children went to bed. Maria listened to his voice and she was amazing.02br
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00I learn from this movie, I felt that heartwarming true life story that has become the most popular family film. You should watch the movie " The Sound Of Music" 02br
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00Music can change everything and every suitations.02br
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00please correct me 02br
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00thanks a lot 02br
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00Rachel0-
  

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0Here are some repairs, Rachel:02br 02br 00In the 01b 00The Sound of Music02b 00, Julie Andrews lights up the screen as Maria. 02b 00 He is a widower whose strict household rules leave no room for music. When Maria 01b 00arrives02b 00 01b 00at02b 00 the house01b 00,02b 00 she 01b 00is02b 00 singing all the time and 01b 00trains the seven children02b 00.

— Mister Micawber

  • 0Here are some repairs, Rachel:02br 02br 00In the 01b 00The Sound of Music02b 00, Julie Andrews lights up the screen as Maria.
  • 02b 00 He is a widower whose strict household rules leave no room for music.
  • When Maria 01b 00arrives02b 00 01b 00at02b 00 the house01b 00,02b 00 she 01b 00is02b 00 singing all the time and 01b 00trains the seven children02b 00.
  • 02br 02br 00One day, he 01b 00plays02b 00 the guitar and 01b 00sings02b 00 a song before his children 01b 00go02b 00 to bed.
  • 02b 02br 02br 00I 01b 00learned02b 00 from this movie01b 00.
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0Here are some repairs, Rachel:02br
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00In the 01b00The Sound of Music02b00, Julie Andrews lights up the screen as Maria. She is a spirited young woman who leaves the convent to become governess to the seven children of Captain Von Trapp01b00.02b00 He is a widower whose strict household rules leave no room for music. 02b
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0Dear Mister Micawber02br
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00Thanks a lot02br
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00Good Luck!02br
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00Rachel0-
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0 Hi Rachel, and welcome to the forums. I have hightlighted the areas that need a change. You do not need to capitalize common nouns, like "children." Sentences end with a period, not a comma. 02br
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00In the 00M00ovie, Julie Andrews lights up the screen as Maria00,02br
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00She is a spirited young woman who leaves the convent to become go
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0Dear Grammar Geek 02br
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00Thank you for correcting my review.02br
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00*** Bless you!02br
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00Rachel0-
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0 I'm sorry - somehow when I saw this, Mr. M.'s response wasn't showing up. I don't usually go back and redo when you have already had a response from someone like him. I just didn't see that it has already been answered. 0-
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