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My name is Marsha, and I'm majoring English Literature in University of Indonesia.

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Child Development and Parental Relationship: in Different Family Structures and Class in Charlie and the Chocolate Factory (2005)
Marsha Alethia

Introduction
When a person is born, the first individuals they meet are family members like mother, father, and siblings. They are bound and dependent on each other, so that is why family is the most important thing that anyone has. A Family, especially parents, play an important role to a child’s physical and psychological development, as well as their social development. A family relationship may also affect the child’s future. However, parents may fail to fulfil the child’s emotional and physical needs. A child who is growing up in such families is likely to have a low self-esteem as adults, who can experience unsatisfying relationship. Therefore, the strength of family bonds is crucial for family members.

A Parent-child relationship has always been an interesting issue, especially in Charlie and the Chocolate Factory (2005). The story highlights the relationship between parents and children that gives a moral value, which is that children have to respect parents and elderly. It is about a boy named Charlie Bucket who came from a poor but loving family. He lived with his father, mother, and four grandparents, in a tiny crooked house. Charlie spent most of his time dreaming about the chocolate that he loves, Wonka Chocolate Bar, but he could only get it once a year, which was on his birthday. One time, the owner of the chocolate factory, Willy Wonka, decided to invite five children who were lucky to get golden tickets to be taken on a tour of his factory, and the winner would get an unknown grand prize. Luckily, Charlie found the last golden ticket and went with his Grandpa Joe, who used to work in the factory. Charlie and the other four winners, which are Augustus Gloop, Veruca Salt, Violet Beauregarde and Mike Teavee, then began their adventure inside of the factory. However, not everything went on plan. There were some problems that the four kids have to deal. In the end, Charlie became the winner.

Charlie and the Chocolate Factory is based on a 1964 classic children’s book which is written by British author, Roald Dahl. Dahl’s works, which are known for its simple informal language and the detailed description, are a combination of various elements such as humour, fantasy and magic. Looking at his early life, candy also played such an important role in his childhood life. According to SparkNotes editors on “Charlie and the Chocolate Factory,” one bright spot for Dahl during his school days was chocolate. He and his classmate often served as chocolate bar testers for Cadburry Chocolate. In time, he finally made a book with chocolate as the theme. The story is quite popular and has been adapted two times for film production. The first adaptation of the story, Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory, is directed by Mel Stuart in 1971, and the second one is directed by Tim Burton in 2005.

The distinction between Willy Wonka and the Chocolate Factory (1971) and Charlie and the Chocolate Factory (2005) is the story of Willy Wonka himself. On the first film adaptation, Willy Wonka’s past was mysterious and not explained (as well as on the book). While on the latest film, Burton twists the plot, including Willy Wonka who had a dark childhood that made him runaway from his father. As a result, this movie brought up the theme of a family relationship. It portrays the importance of family, and what parents need to do in order to raise a well-behave child. Although parent-child relationship is a common theme for this movie, there is a complexity behind it. Looking at most of Roald Dahl’s works, adults are bad guys, but in this one, it seems that the children also cause the trouble. Thus, the parenting issue is hidden in this story. In addition, the complexity can be a society’s pressure, the family structure, or the child’s own freewill.

The movie shows how different kinds of parenting styles gave an impact to a child’s behaviour. For example, the relationship between Willy Wonka and his father. Because his father was a strict dentist, Wonka was not allowed to eat candy or chocolate for his entire life. Therefore, Wonka ran away and never contacted his father again. In contrast, the relationship between Charlie and his family was nicely built. Although his family was very poor, togetherness was all they matter. They gave support and love each other which made Charlie always chose his family first. This can be seen when Charlie had become the winner, and the grand prize that he got was to own the factory. Nevertheless, when he knew that his family could not come to the factory, he chose his family and lived in a tiny house instead of living in Wonka’s huge dreamy factory. Meanwhile, the other four kids tended to misbehave although their parents always gave what they wanted. Therefore, this film also hints on the issue of class aside from the issue of parental relationship, and this is apparent in how class influences the parenting style of the characters.

There is an analysis by Larrocha, Ramos, Reviejo, etc. (2012) that analyzed this movie. The themes that they chose in this movie were love, family, and sexuality. They showed the dialogues of Veruca Salt and Violet Beauregarde to their parents which reflect the bad behaviour and showed no respect. They also argued that the family should be concerned about health of its members. The overeating leaded to obesity, while the shortage leaded to malnutrition. However, their analysis did not explain very detail. They did not include some research to support their argument. There are only few people who have analyzed this movie, and they mainly talk about the director and Johnny Depp as the actor. It is also very rare to found the analysis on Willy Wonka’s relationship with his father in this movie. Thus, this paper will be focus on the relationship between Willy Wonka and his father, as well as Charlie and his parents and grandparents using psychological perspectives.

Speaking about parent-child relationship, parenting styles and parent-child relationships have become a main topic of child psychology. There are so many studies that discuss parent-child relationship which affects children’s behaviour problems. A lot of researchers have done many studies with various topics, including marital conflict (Davies and Cummings), personality differences (Pfister and Smith, William A. White, Hein and Nemeroff), families’ finance (Moore, Kinghorn and Bandy), and lifestyles (Rindfleisch, Burroughs and Denton), with different approaches and methods.

Parenting on early childhood seems to help in building a child’s personality. In their research, Pfister and Smith (1915) argued that adults who have mental or physical disorders usually had experience in their earliest childhood. They used psychoanalysis theories and compared one theory to another; for example, between Freud and Adler’s theory. In respect to this issue, William A. White (1921) has a similar point of view as Pfister and Smith, which is that childhood is the best period to implement the teaching of mental health since it is the time when a child’s character is built. By using experts and studies to analyze the topic, he found that a ruined childhood may cause adulthood delinquency, which is the intention to act crimes (White 1921). Moreover, childhood trauma can also cause depression, anxiety, as well as other disorders, that may persist throughout adulthood (Hein and Nemeroff 2001). Thus, when one experiences difficulties in adult life, he/she must have experience something traumatic during their childhood (Pfister and Smith 1915).

Throughout the years, some researchers have also focused on lifestyle of the parents or families. Family structures are another point that needs to be considered to give impact to children’s personality. In a research by Rindfleisch, Burroughs, and Denton (1997), materialism and consumerism influence parenting style and affect children’s behaviour. They examined the changing family structures (e.g single parenting and divorce) in America and showed the relationship between family structures and consumerism. By using a hypothetical quantitative research, which is a research that has some assumptions, and in order to prove them, researchers collect data by making questionnaires; they found that the degree of family stress is because of the changing family structures and socioeconomics. Children in disrupted or broken families tend to be more materialistic and compulsive buying than children in intact families. Disrupted families, especially marital conflict, has negative impact of various risk environments on children which affect their emotional security later (Davies and Cummings 1994). By using studies and theories, they found that marital conflict can cause the child’s emotional which makes a breakdown of discipline practice and reduce sensitivity of parents. Therefore, parental relationship plays a big role in family life. According to Moore, Kinghorn, and Bandy (2011), happy parental relationships are quite consistently related to better outcomes for children and families across all types of subgroups. They made a quantitative research by analyzing data from the 2007 National Survey of Children’s Health.

Taken as a whole, most researchers were using psychological theories, experts, and studies as their method to analyze children’s behaviour. However, few studies have mixed those all. Therefore, in this paper, it may be advantageous to combine them to analyze parent-child relations on Charlie and the Chocolate Factory (2005). By describing the detail phenomena and conduct comparisons and analysis from a variety of studies, it would be helpful to better understand the reason why the children in this movie have different behaviour towards adults and the society. While a limitation to quantitative research is that they might have missing phenomena because they only focus on one hypothesis testing.

Methodology
This paper will use psychological perspectives, such as birth order theory by Sulloway (1999) and family structure by Bates, Bader and Mencken (2003), as well as Davies and Cummings (1994), to analyze the relationship between parents and children, especially Charlie and Willy Wonka. It will construct the cause first, that is family structure and class issues, and how they influence the parenting style. The impacts of the parenting styles, especially Willy Wonka, will also be analyzed using Freud’s psychoanalysis and other psychological theories.

Discussion
Charlie is the protagonist character in this movie. His family was not rich, powerful, or well-connected. In fact, they barely had enough to eat. Nevertheless, Charlie never complained about it. He loved his family so much that he always kissed his parents and grandparents before he went to bed. He was also a generous boy. Even though he only got a Wonka bar once a year, he liked to share to his family members. He always listened to his parents and grandparents whenever they gave him advice. He was not a spoiled boy even though he was the only child in his family.

On the other hand, the father played important role in Wonka’s life. Willy wonka was the only son of the city’s most famous dentist, Wilbur Wonka. When Wonka was still a young boy, he was not treated like Charlie by his father. Because his father was a dentist, he did not want Wonka to have rotten teeth, so he did not allow Wonka to eat anything sweet. One time, on Halloween day, little Wonka got a lot of candy and chocolate.
Mr. Wonka : “Now, let’s see what the damage is this year, shall we? Caramels. They’d got stuck in your braces, wouldn’t they? Lollipops. Ought to be called “cavities on a stick.” Then we have all this... all this chocolate. You know, just last week, I was reading in a very important medical journal that some children are allergic to chocolate. Makes their noses itch.”
Willy Wonka : “Maybe I’m not allergic. I could try a piece.”
Mr. Wonka : “Really? But why take a chance?” (burn all the sweets in the fireplace)
Clearly, Wonka had a strict father. Looking at the two stories between Charlie and Wonka, they both have similarity in birth order and difference in family structure. Charlie and Wonka are the only children in their family. According to Dr. Frank J. Sulloway’s research (1999), only children are generally ambitious and conform to parental authority. This can be half true on Willy Wonka. He was surely an ambitious boy because he worked hard to be the most chocolate maker in the world. He tried all the sweets and studied what ingredients in them. However, he did not conform to his father’s authority. He chose to run away in order to pursuit his dream. Meanwhile, Charlie was very obedient to his parents and grandparents. He would rather live in his crooked house as long as he stayed with his family than to abandon them and chose his dream as the next owner of the biggest chocolate factory. This contrasting behaviour can be caused by the structure family.

Charlie and Wonka have a different family structure which impact to each personality. Charlie had complete family members, which are father, mother, and grandparents. In contrast, Wonka only had his father. To have a balanced household, the mother and father have relatively similar levels of power at work (Bates, Bader and Mencken 2003). And yet, Wonka did not have a mother, so Mr. Wonka was the only one who had the power to control him.