Cambridge English IELTS 7 - Writing Task1/Test1

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Topic: The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in 5 different countries in 2002. Summarise, make comparisions where relevant.Here is my writing. Hope you will correct it soon, thanks.The table illustrates the proportion of people expense on 3 different categories from 5 countries in 2002. Overall, food/drink/tobacco (FDT) contributed the highest percentages of all the countries. In contrast, leisure/education (LE) is the least important item throughout the consumers.It is clear that Turkey citizens spending in FDT was considerably higher than the others, at 32,14%, followed by was Ireland, at 28,91%. Turkey still play a vital role in the ratio of LE, at 4,35% ; also Italy, at 3,20%. The expenditure on clothing and footwear (CF) was significantly larger in Italy, at 9,00%.On the other hand, people who live in Sweden seemed do not pay much attentions on foods and clothes than in any of the other countries. Since they account for just 15.77% in FDT group, and 5.40% in CF, while the lowest number in LE belonged to Spain, at just 1.98%.

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Where is the table? We cannot help if we can't see what you are writing about. Please attach an image to a new comment in this thread.

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The table illustrates (wrong word. Use "illustrate" for maps, diagrams and pictures. "Illustrate" means "make a picture of.") the proportion of people (wrong form) expense (wrong word) on 3 three different categories from five 5 countries in 2002. ~~Overall, food/drink/tobacco (FDT) contributed the highest percentages of all the countries. In contrast, leisure/education (LE) is the least important item throughout the consumers.~~

(Your first paragraph is not complete. Do not write about the data in the opening paragraph. Describe the figure or table. In this example, write the names of the countries and the categories given. You can define the acronyms here.)

Overall, food/drink/tobacco (FDT) had ~~contributed~~ the highest percentages (values) of all the countries. In contrast, leisure/education (LE) is the least important (The list is not about importance.) item throughout the consumers. (wrong expression)

~~It is clear that~~ (Avoid the "opinion" words: clear, evident, apparent, notable in Task 1. Do not write conclusions or opinions. Just describe the information.) Turkey citizens (Turks / citizens of Turkey) spending in on FDT was considerably higher than the others, at 32,14%, followed by was Ireland, at 28,91%. Turkey still play a vital role in the ratio (wrong words. There are no ratios in the table. A ratio is written like this "5:2" Also "vital role" is incorrect language. ) of LE, at 4,35% ; also Italy, at 3,20%. The percent spent ~~expenditure~~ on clothing and footwear (CF) was significantly larger in Italy, at 9,00%.

On the other hand, people who live in Sweden seemed do not pay much attentions on (That is an opinion or conclusion. Just write about the data values, and do not give reasons or justifications.) foods (wrong form) and clothes than in any of the other countries. Since they account for just 15.77% in FDT group, and 5.40% in CF, while the lowest number (A number is an absolute value such as 67,327. The table has percentages, not numbers.) in LE belonged to Spain, at just 1.98%.

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