Calling friends to review my essay to Franklin&Marshall College.

Hi,
dear friends,
Below is my essay to Franklin&Marshall College, with the topic" what lead you to apply Franklin&Marshall College?"
Please help me to point out the unclear points or any other problems.
I'll appreciate your help and value your suggestions.
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I choose F&M for I value the close relationships with my professors. I am the very student who manages to grasp teacher’s message through tacit eye-contacts, who visits teachers’ offices most frequently, and who always attributes much of the excellence in school to close relationships with teachers. Now I can even imagine the sunny afternoon, when I sit with Professor. Nicholas Montemarano in the exquisite Philadelphia Alumni Writers House interestedly discussing some of his newly published short stories and got his advice on my essay, when I happen to meet my adviser in Shadek-Fackenthal Library and we have a chat in a comfortable seating arrangement.As one of the top 40 colleges in America, F&M ranks 1^st in its faculty accessibility. As a girl who is constantly inspired and therefore deeply influenced by her teachers, I know that F&M is the place for me.



I choose F&M for we both have a keen interest on research. Still remember the many nights when I was writing a history report about Soong May-ling in my 10^th grade. I yearned for the valuable reports about her on New York Times, but I could only access the headline and leadin of some reports from their website. But things will be different when I enter F&M. I can read reports of the May-ling’s time not only from New York Times, but from other newspapers that reflects America’s review of her as well, I can make an independent study to take full advantage of the interdisciplined atmosphere, and I can even apply for the John Marshall Scholars Program to conduct the research and trace May-ling in Nanjing Taipei and New York. As a girl who has cultivated serious dedication to research and who has determined to earn a Ph.D degree, I feel that F&M and me will be a great match.



I choose F&M for there is a stage for me to show my ballroom dance talents. As a girl who has been fascinated by the elegance of ballroom dance for years, who has accumulated sufficient experience in the two-year practise as an instructor of the school club, and who has succeeded in organizing the 2006&2007 New Year Dance in high school, I know that I can find a place here at F&M. I am eager to meet professional peers in F&M ballroom dance club, I am passionate about introducing new ballroom dance steps to F&M campus and I even wildly dream of holding a magnificent “2010 Ballroom Dance Gala”in the newly built Roschel Performing Arts Center on the New Year’s Eve, when we will invite “Chouchenn” to play the music, when we will be in our most shining evening attire, and when with the rhythm in shoes we gracefully step into a brand new year.



I know that F&M is an unusual place. From the first impression of the many red brick buildings nestling among green trees, from the sense of belonging I instantly felt at the sight of the Old Main, I know that F&M is the place for me.