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Letter Writing

bussiness letter

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01b00Dear Sirs,02b02br
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01b00According to our positive deal and long term corporation that has been running between us during these years and your kind support all the time , we have decieded to extend our collaboration more than before , so we intend to increase your share in supplying our .... to 230,000 sets. Obvoisly , such a big deal requires good offer with porper and suitable price . This offer is subjected to discount the price to 10 percent by your esteemed company . Please consider the case carefully and let us have your comment as soon as possible.02b02br
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01b00We look forward to hearing from you soon.02b02br
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01b00Best regards,02b02br
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02br 02br 00Dear Sirs,02br 02br 01b 00Regarding the positive relationship02b 00 and long term 00corporation00 that has been running between us 01b 00for several years02b 00 and your kind support 01b 00during this02b 00 time , we have 00decieded00 to extend our collaboration 01del 01b 00more than before02b 02del 00 , so we intend to increase your share in supplying our .... to 230,000 sets. 00Obvoisly00 , such a 01b 00large 02b 00deal requires 01b 00a02b 00 good offer with 01b 00a02b 00 00porper 00and suitable price .

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  • 02br 02br 00Dear Sirs,02br 02br 01b 00Regarding the positive relationship02b 00 and long term 00corporation00 that has been running between us 01b 00for several years02b 00 and your kind support 01b 00during this02b 00 time , we have 00decieded00 to extend our collaboration 01del 01b 00more than before02b 02del 00 , so we intend to increase your share in supplying our ....
  • to 230,000 sets.
  • 00Obvoisly00 , such a 01b 00large 02b 00deal requires 01b 00a02b 00 good offer with 01b 00a02b 00 00porper 00and suitable price .
  • This offer is subjected to 01b 00your02b 00 01b 00discounting02b 00 the price 01b 00by02b 00 10 percent.
  • 02br 02br 00Best regards,0-
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0corrections in bold, spelling errors highlighted.02br
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01b00Regarding the positive relationship02b00 and long term 00corporation00 that has been running between us 01b00for several years02b00 and your kind support 01b00during this02b00 time , we have 00d
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