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Jaggerlips Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Business Service Listing

My first post so hello everyone, i hope you can help.

I have a service business and on the side of our vans we have the following printed listing our services. Should it be as we have printed or as advised by various people i have spoken to:

-Installation
-Fuel Systems
-Maintenance Works
-Servicing

Is the above correct or should it be as below or completely different?

-Installations
-Fuel Systems
-Maintenance Work
-Servicing

Thanks in advanced

Edward
  

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I would write: Installation Maintenance Servicing (note "Installation" not "Installations". ). " If "Fuel Systems" modifies all three items then it should be mentioned first and the layout should make the relationship clearer.

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  • I would write: Installation Maintenance Servicing (note "Installation" not "Installations".
  • ).
  • " If "Fuel Systems" modifies all three items then it should be mentioned first and the layout should make the relationship clearer.
  • The style "-Installations" is weak and ugly.
  • If you want to use that style then you should use a proper dash (not a hyphen) and put a space after it ("– Installations").
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I would write:

Installation
Maintenance
Servicing

(note "Installation" not "Installations". The latter is not wrong, but for overall harmony here I prefer the former.).

The inclusion of "Fuel Systems" as an item on a level with the other three is confusing, especially since it comes after "Installation", leaving the question "Installation of what?"
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Hi

Our overall work speciality is generator installations with fuel systems being a particular aspect of our work. I agree your list looks a lot neater, so shall be out this evening picking off the excess letters.

FYI the dashes i inserted were to bullet point each service and do not actually exist in reality.

Thanks for the reply,
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JaggerlipsOur overall work speciality is generator installations with fuel systems being a particular aspect of our work
So the word "generator(s)" appears somewhere else in a way that makes it clear that the other four items relate to that?
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Yes that is correct, it is stated in the company name.
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JaggerlipsYes that is correct, it is stated in the company name.
Oh, OK, that makes more sense then.
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