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00I am new here. I am very interested in business letters. I have writen 3 different letters. Could you please correct my letters. I thank you in advance. 02br
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00You are a small company in Germany who supply gifts to various outlets. These gifts consists of ornaments, candles, keyrings, mugs, etc.. You are writing to a company in Britain who specialise in ornate candles. You have seen an old brochure of theirs passed on to you by a friend and wish to find out more information. Your letter should give reference to costs, samples, delivery and brochures. 02br
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00Dear Mr. Bailey, 02br
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00Receptionist – Ref.: brochure 02br
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00I have received your address, fax and e – mail address from my friend. I am writing this letter because I have been informed by my friend that you are a company in Britain who specialise in ornate candles. 02br
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00I have a small company in Germany and supply gifts to various outlets. The gifts which I supply gifts to various outlets. The gifts which I supply are made of ornaments, candles, key rings, mugs, etc.. 02br
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00I am interested in your ornate candles. I saw your products an old brochure on to my by a friend. I would like to more information about the candles. 02br
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00Please send me the newest brochures and also the samples, too. Let me know about the cost of the samples. Please give me details on your terms of payment and delivery. 02br
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00I thank you in advance for the sending your newest brochures and the samples. 02br
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00If you have any question please ring me up immediately. 02br
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00Yours sincerely 02br
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00Mueller 02br
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00You are a buyer for a department store in Paderborn responsible for the clothing department. You have been informed by a colleague about a new clothing manufacturer specialising in ladies fashion and that they are looking for an outlet. Your letter should give reference to discounts available, delivery and sample viewing. 02br
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00Dear Mrs. Mc Daniel, 02br
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00I have received your address, fax and telephone number on the newspaper (“the daily news”) on Saturday 14th April 2005. 02br
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00I am a buyer for a department store in Paderborn and also responsible for the clothing department. 02br
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00I have been informed by a colleague about a new clothing manufacture specialising in ladies fashion and that they are looking for an outlet. 02br
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00Please send me sample for viewing and let me know about discounts available. 02br
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00Please give me details on your term of delivery for references please click my home page on the internet www.clothes-pb.de. 02br
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00I thank you in advance and waiting for yours offers. 02br
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00Yours sincerely 02br
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00Becker 02br
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00You run a small hardware shop and have been having problems with you current supplier. You decide to contact a leading manufacturer to enquire about their prices for tools, if purchased on a regular basis, and about delivery. You require a brochure with a price list. 02br
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00Dear Miss Harry, 02br
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00receptionist – Ref.: brochure with a price list. 02br
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00I got your name, address, fax and e – mail address from your home page. I have been already informed by my girlfriend that you are manufactures of hardware tools. I am interested in your company. 02br
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00I run a small hardware shop in Hahn. The Hardware which I sell is for example soundcard, graphic card and etc. 02br
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00I am writing you this enquiry letter because I have problem with my current supplier from last one week. That’ s why I decide to contact you as a leading manufacturer of Hardware tools. 02br
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00Please send your new brochure with a price list as soon as possible. The reason is why I need brochure with a price list is, I have received many enquiries from customers to fix their own personal computers. 02br
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00Please quote your lowest price for hardware tools, on a regular basis purchased. Please give me details on your terms of delivery. If you have any question about enquiries, please ring me up immediately. 02br
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00I thank you in advance and waiting for yours offers. 02br
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00Yours sincerely 02br
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00Judith 02br
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