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Petusek Posted 14 years ago
Business & Finance
Business English + IT terminology combined (short text correction)
Hello,
I'm often confused by the terminology used in Business and Finance, which is quite different in my native language. I believe and hope I've got most of the expressions right, but...
Please, may I possibly ask those who know better than me (ie the majority of the people here) to check the following short text for any errors?
If you find a grammatical mistake, I'll be grateful if you correct that too.
Many thanks in advance!
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[software component name]
The [software component name] is used for keeping records of business opportunities and bringing them to fruition.
The main advantages of the [software component name]
Evaluation of business opportunities
The [software component name] continuously records the development of business opportunities in an all in one clear and concise agenda. It easily answers your questions as to how big the next possible trade is, what the probability and the expected date of its conclusion are, and who is responsible for the trade. The user thus gets their hands on a unique tool to evaluate the feasibility of the sale and the future profitability of the company. Additionally, by using the [sotware component name], it is possible to retrospectively evaluate the procedures leading to the fastest conclusion of a contract.
..."
Best,
P.
I'm often confused by the terminology used in Business and Finance, which is quite different in my native language. I believe and hope I've got most of the expressions right, but...
Please, may I possibly ask those who know better than me (ie the majority of the people here) to check the following short text for any errors?
If you find a grammatical mistake, I'll be grateful if you correct that too.
Many thanks in advance!
"...
[software component name]
The [software component name] is used for keeping records of business opportunities and bringing them to fruition.
The main advantages of the [software component name]
Evaluation of business opportunities
The [software component name] continuously records the development of business opportunities in an all in one clear and concise agenda. It easily answers your questions as to how big the next possible trade is, what the probability and the expected date of its conclusion are, and who is responsible for the trade. The user thus gets their hands on a unique tool to evaluate the feasibility of the sale and the future profitability of the company. Additionally, by using the [sotware component name], it is possible to retrospectively evaluate the procedures leading to the fastest conclusion of a contract.
..."
Best,
P.
Top answer
As nobody has replied to this request of mine, I'm going to try and correct at least some of my own mistakes. However, I would really appreciate native speakers' help or advice. This is a caption: The [software component name] is used for keeping records for business opportunities and bringing them to fruition .
- As nobody has replied to this request of mine, I'm going to try and correct at least some of my own mistakes.
- However, I would really appreciate native speakers' help or advice.
- This is a caption: The [software component name] is used for keeping records for business opportunities and bringing them to fruition .
- ): Evaluation of business opportunities And some minor corrections in the body of the text (I hope I didn't make even more mistakes in the process): The [software component name] continuously records the development of business opportunities in an all-in-one clear and concise agenda.
- It easily answers your questions as to how big the next possible trade is, what the probability and the expected date of its conclusion are, and who is responsible for the trade.
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As nobody has replied to this request of mine, I'm going to try and correct at least some of my own mistakes. 
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