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I´m writing a cover letter. Could you help me with only one, but long sentence. Could you tell me whether it´s correct:

It is my belief that that I am a perfect candidate for this position based on the following reasons:

my skills closely match those outlined in your job description. Therefore I can make a positive contribution to your company;
Mastering diverse and challenging tasks as a member of a strong team represents my work attitude;
Your future-oriented and focused processes, the variety addressed sectors and spectrum of services in the performance level of [name of the organization] are in line with my idea of ??an ideal employer with which I can identify myself..

Thank you in advance

CalifJim · Accepted Answer

TinaMr
It is my belief that that I am a the perfect candidate for this position based on the following reasons:
My skills closely match those outlined in your job description. Therefore I can make a positive contribution to your company. [A semi-colon is not appropriate here.]
Mastering diverse and challenging tasks as a member of a strong team represents my work attitude. ["work ethic" is also possible and common in this context.]
Your future-oriented and focused processes, the variety addressed sectors and spectrum of services in the performance level of [name of the organization] are in line with my idea of ??an ideal employer ~~with which I can identify myself.~~ I can identify with.

Your third point is not easy to understand. It seems to be a lot of jargon that doesn't amount to a clear idea. I'm referring specifically to this:

Your future-oriented and focused processes, the variety addressed sectors and spectrum of services in the performance level of [name of the organization]

You might try to find a simpler and more direct way of saying that. I'd suggest something myself if I knew what you meant.

CJ

AlpheccaStars · Answer

TinaMrCould you help me with only one, but long sentence.

There is more than one sentence here.
That's good, because long sentences are frequently cumbersome and inelegant. Even so, the writing is not particularly engaging.

TinaMrIt is my belief that that I am

Don't you want to convince the other guy to believe this? Here is an alternative:

I was excited to read the description of the job you posted, because I think you will find me a perfect match. My skills, especially managing complex highly secure networks, is exactly what you are looking for. I have several years of experience and keep up with the latest developments in the field. Also, I have always worked on teams, and rank the success of my team as a very high personal priority.

I have no idea what you third point is. It seems like mumbo-jumbo.

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