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Snuppelina Posted 13 years ago
Grammar
brush up a sentence
Hi there! I have a sentence and I can't think of any ways of improving it. Does it sound ok? Maybe to switch the "developed..." with "centered" part?
The goal is to use a novel ?-ray detection technique developed at the organization and centered upon a gamma spectrometer.
The goal is to use a novel ?-ray detection technique developed at the organization and centered upon a gamma spectrometer.
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-ray detection technique using a gamma spectrometer.
- -ray detection technique using a gamma spectrometer.
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Why not this?—
The goal is to develop a novel ?-ray detection technique using a gamma spectrometer.
The goal is to develop a novel ?-ray detection technique using a gamma spectrometer.
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Thank you!
I need to emphasize that the technique was developed at this particular organizaton (I will include its name in the document) because I am talking about other research centres, too. What to do in this case?
I need to emphasize that the technique was developed at this particular organizaton (I will include its name in the document) because I am talking about other research centres, too. What to do in this case?
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The goal is to develop a novel ?-ray detection technique at this organization using a gamma spectrometer.
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It has already been developed, and the goal is to use it, not to develop. But I need to emphasize that it was developed at this particular organization.
It has already been developed, and the goal is to use it, not to develop. But I need to emphasize that it was developed at this particular organization.
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The goal is to use a novel ?-ray detection technique developed at the organization using (? repeats again or centered upon) a 4p gamma spectrometer?
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'Using' something is hardly a goal—you simply use it. What is the purpose of this sentence?
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The purpose of this sentence is to emphasize that a novel ?-ray detection technique was developed at this particular organization and that it is based on a 4pi gamma detector.
The context is the following: experiment preparations were underway, and cross-section dependence is to be determined with the help of a novel ?-ray detection technique developed at the organization, which includes using
The context is the following: experiment preparations were underway, and cross-section dependence is to be determined with the help of a novel ?-ray detection technique developed at the organization, which includes using
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Hi there!
I need to say that the chemiluminescence intensity varies as the emissions wavelength varies. How is it better to say?
Figure 1 shows variation in chemiluminescence intensity with variation of the emission wavelength of the laser.
Maybe like this: Figure 1 shows variation in chemiluminescence intensity as the emission wavelength of the laser varies/changes.
I need to say that the chemiluminescence intensity varies as the emissions wavelength varies. How is it better to say?
Figure 1 shows variation in chemiluminescence intensity with variation of the emission wavelength of the laser.
Maybe like this: Figure 1 shows variation in chemiluminescence intensity as the emission wavelength of the laser varies/changes.
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You don't need 'variation', etc. twice:
Figure 1 shows variation in chemoluminescence intensity with laser emission wavelength
I would stick with the more usual prefix 'chemo'.
Figure 1 shows variation in chemoluminescence intensity with laser emission wavelength
I would stick with the more usual prefix 'chemo'.
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Hi, what do you think of this sentence:
The chemiluminescence on varying the generation wavelength of the laser is similar to the absorption spectrum.
I think "on varying" in the meaning "depending on/against/versus" is incorrect, am I right?
The chemiluminescence on varying the generation wavelength of the laser is similar to the absorption spectrum.
I think "on varying" in the meaning "depending on/against/versus" is incorrect, am I right?
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