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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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Broken beyond repair
Hi,
i am songwriter/lyricist, i just wrote a lyrics that include phrase "broke beyond repair".
By "broke", i mean "become broken", but i use to verify phrases i use by simply googling them,
and it seems no-one uses other form than "broken beyond repair" so is my usage valid ?
I know context matters, so i write the whole line here:
"One day it slipped off her hands and broke beyond repair" - does it sound okay ?
Excuse me if its a silly question, english is far from being my first language.
Thanks in advance.
i am songwriter/lyricist, i just wrote a lyrics that include phrase "broke beyond repair".
By "broke", i mean "become broken", but i use to verify phrases i use by simply googling them,
and it seems no-one uses other form than "broken beyond repair" so is my usage valid ?
I know context matters, so i write the whole line here:
"One day it slipped off her hands and broke beyond repair" - does it sound okay ?
Excuse me if its a silly question, english is far from being my first language.
Thanks in advance.
Top answer
" The former might not scan. "Broke" is the past tense of "to break," so that part is fine. Not a silly question.
- " The former might not scan.
- "Broke" is the past tense of "to break," so that part is fine.
- Not a silly question.
- Please post the whole song.
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The idiom is "slipped out of her hands," or "slipped from her hands." The former might not scan.
"Broke" is the past tense of "to break," so that part is fine.
Not a silly question. Please post the whole song.
"Broke" is the past tense of "to break," so that part is fine.
Not a silly question. Please post the whole song.
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Thank you very much, deadrat. Here you go:
"Technology cult"
Jenny really loved her iphone, considered it her friend
she would take it to the shower, she took it everywhere
but one day it slipped out of her hands and broke beyond repair
she got depressed took fifty pills to leave existence of despair
[Techno deity smiles an evil grin]
George was a proud owner of a newe
"Technology cult"
Jenny really loved her iphone, considered it her friend
she would take it to the shower, she took it everywhere
but one day it slipped out of her hands and broke beyond repair
she got depressed took fifty pills to leave existence of despair
[Techno deity smiles an evil grin]
George was a proud owner of a newe
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I can't quite get the verses to scan. The "Jenny" line has nine syllables; the "George" line has eight. I didn't check the stresses. Maybe the music makes it work.
Pair repair/despair and dead/head rhyme, but bath/smart don't.
There are a few problems with articles (from a strictly non-artistic point of view):
"a newest VR gear" should probably be "the newest VR grea
Pair repair/despair and dead/head rhyme, but bath/smart don't.
There are a few problems with articles (from a strictly non-artistic point of view):
"a newest VR gear" should probably be "the newest VR grea
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