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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
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Better way to word this expression.

Again, from something I'm editing for an internship, here is a sentence that I am thinking might sound better if slightly reworded:

This may be the reason why mobile marketing has a five-times higher response rate than direct mail, [rest of the sentence not relevant].

Would it be better to use "five-time"? Neither really sound good to me. I am thinking maybe using five-fold instead. Are there other options? Or which is best?

Thanks again so much for your help!
  

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Anonymous Again, from something I'm editing for an internship, here is a sentence that I am thinking might sound better if slightly reworded: This may be the reason why mobile marketing has a five-times higher response rate than direct mail, [rest of the sentence not relevant]. If you insist, use "that", but not "why". Nothing is needed, really.

— Philip

  • Anonymous Again, from something I'm editing for an internship, here is a sentence that I am thinking might sound better if slightly reworded: This may be the reason why mobile marketing has a five-times higher response rate than direct mail, [rest of the sentence not relevant].
  • If you insist, use "that", but not "why".
  • Nothing is needed, really.
  • Would it be better to use "five-time"?
  • Neither really sound good to me.
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AnonymousAgain, from something I'm editing for an internship, here is a sentence that I am thinking might sound better if slightly reworded:

This may be the reason why mobile marketing has a five-times higher response rate than direct mail, [rest of the sentence not relevant]. If you insist, use "that", but no
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