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Please correct my writting! ThanksTo do excercise is so important to everyone, including indoor and outdoor activities. Today I would like to tell about my indoor activity.In my indoor activities, I prefer to do gym for making six-pack abs, just taking about ten minutes to practise.I always do this after coming home, before taking bath. While I do this, I just focus my mind to the exercise, release any stress from work.It's the reason I like this activity

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DungbuiTo do excercise is so important to everyone, including indoor and outdoor activities. Today I would like to tell about my indoor activity.

To do excercise ( 1) is so ( 2) important to everyone, including indoor and outdoor activities. ( 3) Today I would like to tell ( 4) about my indoor activity.

Errors:

1. Misspelling and unnatural use of the infinitive.

2. incorrect use of adverb

3. incorrect placement of phrase

4. "tell" requires an object.

Corrected:

Exercising, including indoor and outdoor activities, is very important to everyone. Today I would like to tell you about my indoor activity.

Exercising, including indoor and outdoor activities, is so important to everyone that you should do some every day. Today I would like to tell you about my indoor activity.

Better English:

Regular exercise, both indoors and outdoors, is very important. Today I would like to tell you about my indoor exercises.

DungbuiIn my indoor activities, I prefer to do gym for making six-pack abs, just taking about ten minutes to practise.

That is very awkward English.

I want to develop my six-pack abs, so I go to the gym and do intensive abdominal exercises for ten minutes.

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