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Mickey Mouse 8241 Posted 9 years ago
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Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murderer if he wanted to speak either to the victim’s family, or to the jury.

If the following is our main sentence:(Parallelism)

"Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murderer if he wanted to speak either to the victim’s family, or to the jury."


Can we rewrite as following( in the way keep the parallelism as well)?


"Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murderer if he wanted to speak to either the victim’s family, or the jury."


If the following is our main sentence:(Parallelism)


"Air pollution may come either from the ocean as natural contaminants given off by sea life or from the internal combustion engines of automobile."

Can we rewrite as following( in the way keep the parallelism as well)?


"Air pollution may come from either the ocean as natural contaminants given off by sea life or the internal combustion engines of automobile."

  

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Mickey Mouse 8241 Can we rewrite as following( in the way keep the parallelism as well)? " Yes, but I would delete the comma after "family". " This one does not read as smoothly to me.

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  • Mickey Mouse 8241 Can we rewrite as following( in the way keep the parallelism as well)?
  • " Yes, but I would delete the comma after "family".
  • " This one does not read as smoothly to me.
  • It is easy to start reading "natural contaminants given off by sea life or the internal combustion engines of automobile" as one phrase, and then have to backtrack when this turns out not to make sense.
  • "automobile" should be "automobiles".
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Mickey Mouse 8241Can we rewrite as following( in the way keep the parallelism as well)?
"Before the judge announced the punishment, he asked the murderer if he wanted to speak to either the victim’s family, or the jury."

Yes, but I would delete the comma after "family".

Mickey Mouse 8241"Air pollution may come from either the
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