Before the death of truth...

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Dear readers,

This is Raji once again in your forum with my newest creation. I don’t know how is it?

So don’t forget to put some words on it and suggest me how I can improve my poetry creation capability.
I specially request to Maj and Radrook for correction of these junk lines.

Thanks and Regards

Raji

Before the death of truth
Beside the death of trust
Behind the demise of faith
I assured myself
And fight myself
I confess my soul
To close my eyes
To press my voice
I lie myself
For the survival of a truth
A truth…that was never ever been
From your side

Anita_a · Accepted Answer

That's a nice usage of words ... There is a very good depth in your poem.If u don't mind maybe I could tell u something...
Make it fought instead of fight in the 5th line. Make it surpress instead of Press in the 8th line. Add 'to' in the line 9, 'I lie myself'.Sorry, if I hurt your feelings... the teacher in me couldn't keep quite.

Raji · Answer

Hi Anita
I am glad to read your comments and guidance. Believe me that is the thing that I was always needed from this forum after posting of my any stuff.

But it seems people over this forum don’t want to initiate to give guidance and highlight errors.

I am thankful to you for your sincere teaching feelings. Hope you will continue your guidance in future.

Thanks n Regards
Raji

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After correction here is new format of poem:

Before the death of truth
Beside the death of trust
Behind the demise of faith
I assured myself
And fought myself
I confess my soul
To close my eyes
To suppress my voice
I lie to myself
For the survival of a truth
A truth…that was never ever been
From your side

Anita_a · Answer

Thanks Raji... keep up the good work!

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