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Contiluo Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Basketball game

The following essay originally written by a student has been revised by me. Please help me make it sound natural. Thanks a lot.

My Favorite Sport
Introduction
Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action. It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game. A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill. Meanwhile, I’ve always enjoyed playing basketball because that is what I love to do. I really enjoy playing this game and I practice a lot outside. I play basketball with my friends after school and on weekends. On weekdays, we play on the basketball courts at our school. We usually play about an hour before going home to finish our homework. On weekends, we usually play at different community parks for the entire afternoon. While I’m on the court, it gives me a clear mind. It is easy to dribble, shoot, and easy to do layups. I’m there just playing freely and have fun. Although I am not a good player myself, I enjoy every bit of this game. There are some reasons why I love playing basketball as follows.

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First, it is attainable and not expensive. Basketball is very much affordable. All you need is a ball and a basketball court with a rim. If you want to play, go to the nearest basketball court available in your community or your local basketball club. I prefer to play with others rather than just playing alone because many people have creative ideas and find new ways to trick the opposing players. Playing Basketball is very entertaining since there are endless ideas you can think of just with a hoop and a basketball.

Second, it helps me keep in good shape and improve my overall health. Basketball is a fast moving game that involves a lot of variety, including shooting, dribbling, passing, rebounding, defense and much more. In this sport, you have to have good aim to shoot, good jumping skills to rebound; you have to be quick, and also have good ball handling skills. It is great for toning the legs and butt, and your arms, shoulders and back muscles. Thus, it is a great workout that can help you burn calories, build endurance, improve balance and eye-hand coordination, develop concentration and self-discipline, build up muscle. Shortly, it can help you stay healthy and fit.

Third, it improves my mental health. Playing basketball can serve as a stress-buster. It is because playing the game releases endorphins in your brain, that can make you happy and feel good about yourself. Whenever you're stressed-out after a day at work, a game of basketball can make you forget your worries as you focus on the game. What's more, a few successful stints at shooting can boost your confidence and give you a high. All in all, playing basketball promotes mental wellness.

Fourth, it teaches me the value of teamwork. Basketball is a team sport which requires good co-operation, foresight, skill and organization. When I was younger, I did not like to play team sports because I was afraid I was not good enough. Also, I couldn't handle criticism or ridicule from others very well. After my friends got me to start playing basketball, I found out I was actually good at it. This really boosted my self-confidence. In addition, through practicing and playing basketball. I am no longer a weak, shy, or angry young man. Because of the sport, I now enjoy good health and great friendships. This is why I love basketball so much.

Five, it helps me make new friends. Basketball is a fun game that people of all levels and ages can enjoy. It brings people together and creates bonds and friendships. I can socialize and meet other people with similar interests to mine. I can see my teammates regularly and they teach me about being a good team player. It is always fun to meet like-minded people.

Six, it’s readily accessible. Basketball is very exciting to watch on television because when you watch it, you can take the moves you see the professional’s perform and add them to your style of play. I take many of my moves from professional basketball players and make them my own because they expand my arsenal of tricks. There are a variety of tricks the players perform during games it makes the games much more enjoyable to be watching.

Conclusion
However, basketball isn’t just something you play for fun. It is a relationship between you and the ball, you and your teammates. It’s a way of life. You can score a lot, you can lose easily, and you can quit. You have to make the decision. All you have to do is believe in yourself and throw that ball into the basket. You have to try and to dare to win. If you discourage yourself, you lose from the first dribble. But if you try, if you believe yourself, if you practice, if you do your best, if you dare to win and become the best, and if you show your opponent that you’re sure of what you do, you win the game from the first throw. Just do it.
  

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contiluo The following essay , originally written by a student , has been revised by me. The active voice is far more natural! We almost never use personal pronouns as agents in passive voice sentences.

  • contiluo The following essay , originally written by a student , has been revised by me.
  • The active voice is far more natural!
  • We almost never use personal pronouns as agents in passive voice sentences.
  • This is the natural version.
  • I have revised the following essay, originally written by a student (one of my students).
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contiluoThe following essay, originally written by a student, has been revised by me.
The active voice is far more natural!
We almost never use personal pronouns as agents in passive voice sentences.

This is the natural version.
I have revised the following essay, originally written by a student (one of my studen
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I should not have made the same mistake again because one of the teachers of the forum has corrected my errors before.

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