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Derby Shire Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

Awkward choice of wording

'Would you like to come with me and enjoy the game together?'

I am correcting an essay and found this question. The writer is inviting a friend to watch a game with him. I think that the choice of vocabulary is awkward, and that there is a problem somewhere but I'm blanking out and can't pinpoint the exact problem.

Any help is appreciated.
  

Top answer

It's too wordy. It's implicit that there will be enjoyment, Just say eg Would you like to come to the game with me? Clive

— Clive

  • It's too wordy.
  • It's implicit that there will be enjoyment, Just say eg Would you like to come to the game with me?
  • Clive
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It's too wordy. It's implicit that there will be enjoyment,
Just say
eg Would you like to come to the game with me?

Clive
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Thanks a lot Clive.

I also thought of 'Would you like to enjoy watching the game together?'

The fact that she is joining is implied.

Thanks a lot!

Ann
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Still seems wordy.

eg Would you like to watch the game together?
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