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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
Grammar

At the stationery shop

0 Please correct my dialogue. Thanks.02br
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00Salesgirl: Please come in and see our wide array of stationery goods.02br
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00Customer : Do you sell paper clips?02br
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00Salesgirl: Yes, we do. A box of paper clips costs 4 dollars.02br
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00 Customer : I would also like a file with a lot of folders. I also need a ream of A4 paper too. Please tell me the prices of02br
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00 these two things.02br
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00Salesgirl: This red file with 15 folders is 10 dollars. It is of good quality. That one with 12 folders is slightly cheaper and02br
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00 is 7 dollars. The ream of paper is 8 dollars.02br
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00 Customer : Please wrap a box of paper clips. the red file and a ream o f paper for me.02br
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00Salesgirl: Right. That will cost you 22 dollars.0-
  

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12blockquote 10The only suggestion I have would be to avoid using both "also" and "too" in the same sentence. They both mean about the same thing so it comes across as redundant. Otherwise your dialog looks good.

— RayH

  • 12blockquote 10The only suggestion I have would be to avoid using both "also" and "too" in the same sentence.
  • They both mean about the same thing so it comes across as redundant.
  • Otherwise your dialog looks good.
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01cite10Anonymous12cite10I also need a ream of A4 paper too.12blockquote
10The only suggestion I have would be to avoid using both "also" and "too" in the same sentence. They both mean about the same thing so it comes across as redundant. Otherwise your dialog looks good. 0-
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0 "It is of good quality" is correct but sounds a little stilted, like a translation. In the US you'd be more likely to hear simply, "It's a good-quality folder." 02br
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00However, you get 10 bonus points for spelling "stationery" correctly and NOT with the "a"! 0-
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0Another comment of the "make this more natural" - in the US, we'd never say "wrap it up for me" for something like a box of paper clips. 02br
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00"I'll take..." would be more natural.0-
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0 Barbara, Delmobile and anyone else who cares to comment,02br
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00This probably isn't the best place to ask but this post and the responses bring up a question I've been wondering about. The dialog here is a perfect example of correct grammar and vocabulary but it contains several examples of what a native speaker would consider stilted phrasing. When checking someone's l
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0RayH: 02br
00Pointing out such idioms a native speaker would use or stilted phrasing would be very appreciated ...02br
00It all depends on your time, you're already doing great service050010id1
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0Ray, it's a good quesiton and one I'm not alone in struggling with. Sometimes, the questioner helps us out be asking for exactly that: 01i00Are they correct, and do they sound like good, natural English to a native speaker? 02i00When we get that type of question, we know exactly what the person is asking for.02br
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00Sometimes, we get: 01i0
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0I appreciate all the help given. I know it takes a lot of energy from all of you and I would like my dialogue to be more natural as spoken by a native speaker. Thanks.0-
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0Okay then! 01blockquote
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10Salesgirl: Welcome. Is there anything I can help you find?12br
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10Customer : Yes, do you have any paper clips?12br
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10Salesgirl: Yes, we do. Here's a box for 4 dollars.12br
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10Customer : I would also like box of folder
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0Thank you Grammar Geek for your help. The dialogue now is vastly improved.0-
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