Asking for advice about my cover letter

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I first wanted to thank everybody for this web, is absolutely awesome, I had to make my cover letter and had been reading
since yesterday many diferent posibilities, thank you.

My situation is this one, I want to aplay for a job in diferent korean companies, and this is what I have done as a cover
for my cv, actually there are no vacancies on any company but I want to try.
I would be really thankfull if someone can give me a hand.

Miguel xxxxxx xxxxxx

C/xxxx streetxxx flatxxx

Madrid post code xxxxxx

Number xxxxxxx

Movile xxxxxxx

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April 7, 2009

Human Resource Director

Dear sir

I am writing to apply for a position of xxxxxx , knowing xxxxx is a company with a great reputation and one of the leading companies in Asia that make me a good candidate for the continuous development of the company.

I appreciate Korea, and the challenge that would be working on a foreign company.

I finished my studies as a steward recently and I had a proven success as a responsible and a team player person working on TV as assistant director, managing the crew and the actors for the director I experienced how to handle situations under pressure.

Since I worked in my father’s private dentist clinic as assistant I have learnt a customer oriented personality, and being patient and comprehensive when difficulties come.

My language skills are growing, I have great score in the IELTS exam (English), and my first language is Spanish, but I’m willing to learn Korean. And Mandarin in a future.

I believe that my working experience, my studies, and my highly motivated attitude make me a strong candidate for a place in the company.

I would be grateful if you would consider my application and I look forward to hearing from you. please contact me at xxxxxxxxxxxx, or email me at ... Thanks for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully

Miguel xxxxxxxxx xxxxxxxxx

sorry, I have a question too, I don't understand, is there any diference between a cover letter and an aplication letter?
thank you

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Welcome to the forums.
First, I will answer your question. A cover letter is a one-page very short introduction to a subject. Every cover letter has one or more attached detailed documents. Think of it like the cover of a book - The cover has the title, author, picture, and maybe a brief advertisement like "7 weeks on the best-seller list!"
I have made a few comments and suggestions on your letter. It could be improved by being more specific, such as how long you worked as assistant director, and what degree you received (and when you finished).

michael1stayI am writing to apply for a (usually we say "the", for example "the position of Administrative Assistant" The indefinite article "a" is not so strong, meaning any position that might be available.) position of xx . , ~~knowing~~ xx is a company with a great reputation and one of the leading companies in Asia that makes me a good candidate for the continuous development of the company.(I don't see your logic that a company's reputation would have any effect on your being a candidate)

I appreciate Korea (what has Korea done for you personally to appreciate it? Usually we appreciate someone for their assistance or a gift they gave us.) , and the challenge that would be working in a foreign company.

I finished my studies as a steward recently and I have a proven success record as a responsible and a team player ~~person~~ working in a TV studio (or for a TV program) as assistant director, managing the crew and the actors for the director. I learned ~~experienced~~ how to handle situations under the pressure (of a tight schedule?).

Since I worked in my father’s private dentist clinic as assistant I have learnt a customer oriented personality (usually a personality is something you are born with, not something you learn) and being patient and comprehensive when difficulties come.

My language skills are growing, I have great score in the IELTS exam (English), and my first language is Spanish, but I’m willing to learn Korean and Mandarin in the future.

I believe that my working experience, my studies, and my highly motivated attitude make me a strong candidate for a place in the company.
I would be grateful if you would consider my application and I look forward to hearing from you. please contact me at xxxxxx, or email me at xxxxxxx. Thanks for your time and consideration.

Michael1stay · Answer

Thank you AlpheccaStars for your advise.
you said that might be better giving more precise information,
but would you do it even if you are sending the curriculum?
I will check on everything and see what I can do to do it better
thank you again and I really apreciate your help.

Michael1stay · Answer

Hello this is a new revised version following AlpheccaStars's advises, if anybody can give me an opinion,or how to make it better I will APRECIATE it very much.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

michael1stay
Human Resource Director

Dear sir

I am writing to apply for the position of flight attendant; (you need a subject for this sentence. it is better to make it a separate sentence. Also the passive voice is very weak.) is well known the reputation of xx company on efficiency as I like to be, efficient and positive.

I like Korea, and the challenge that would be working in a foreign company.

I finished my studies as a steward recently and (these are 2 separate thoughts, so they should be in 2 different sentences) I have a proven success record as a responsible ~~and a~~ team player working in a TV studio as assistant director. Managing the crew and the actors for the director I learned how to handle situations under the pressure of a tight schedule.

Since (When is better than since) I worked in my father’s private dentist clinic as an assistant, I have learnt a customer oriented attitudes and behaviours, and being patient and comprehensive (comprehensive is not a good adjective in this context. A report or study can be comprehensive (very complete and thorough). It does not make sense for a person to be comprehensive.) when difficulties come.

My language skills are growing, (full stop - this is a comma splice) I have great score in the IELTS exam (English), and my first language is Spanish, but I’m willing to learn Korean and Mandarin in the future.

I believe that my working experience, my studies, and my highly motivated attitude make me a strong candidate for a place (it would be better to repeat the title of the position you are applying for, or perhaps "a position such as attendant, ... etc) in the company.

I would be grateful if you would consider my application and I look forward to hearing from you. Please contact me at xx, or email me at mailto:%28Email%20removed%29. Thanks for your time and consideration.

Don't want to extend any longer but should I put my name as a title in the upper part of the page.>> No, the recipient should be at the top. Yous should be under the body of text.
thanks ..

Michael1stay · Answer

thank you AlpheccaStars. I don't understand the first part, could you give me an example?

I am writing to apply for the position of flight attendant; (you need a subject for this sentence. it is better to make it a separate sentence. Also the passive voice is very weak.) is well known the reputation of xx company on efficiency as I like to be, efficient and positive.

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