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Alex-93 Posted 11 years ago
Letter Writing

Asking for a favor to check my cover letter

Hello everybody,

I'm about to apply for a six-month internship to several north american companies and a flawless application is expected from me. That's why it would be great if an american native could do a quick spelling/grammar check.

Thanks in advance, I really appreciate your help!

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m very interested in a challenging internship with *** as I have always identified with the company’s determination, creativity and enthusiasm to create unique automobiles. Such a passionate and dynamic environment would be the perfect opportunity for me to participate actively as an energetic and ambitious kind of person.

I am currently successfully pursuing my bachelor’s degree course in International Management at the *** University of Applied Sciences (Germany) as my above-average grades highlight.
Besides my fundamental knowledge of economics, including lectures in accounting, marketing and intercultural communication I have been able to extend my practical experience during my six-week internship at *** GmbH in ***(Germany). *** is the worldwide leading company for bathroom solutions and has provided me with the opportunity to contribute to the planning process of operative cost centers with SAP and Excel as well as to the preparation of trade fairs and PowerPoint presentations for executives. As a consequence I am confident with deadline-oriented work.

Furthermore my two-week internship at the *** (German bank) has equipped me with a self-confident appearance and strong interpersonal skills because I worked as a teller in the customer service department.
Moreover my studies contain manufacturing techniques and material flow concepts. These skills are further enhanced through a working student job in a highly automated company in the ceramic branch.
In addition I have been leading the finances for my high-school diploma year which taught me to administer funds as well as conducting negotiations with local promoters.

I’m confident that my overall qualifications will be adequate for working with your company and I look forward to hear from you soon. My résumé is enclosed and if you need any additional information, I’ll be glad to supply it. Thank you for your time and consideration.


Yours sincerely,

Alex 93

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Very well done. ) A verb is needed for a more parallel construction. Besides increasing my fundamental knowledge of economics, including lectures in accounting, marketing and intercultural communication I have been able to extend my practical experience...

  • Very well done.
  • ) A verb is needed for a more parallel construction.
  • Besides increasing my fundamental knowledge of economics, including lectures in accounting, marketing and intercultural communication I have been able to extend my practical experience...
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Very well done. I have only one concern about the phrasing of one sentence (which many employers wouldn't notice, but then let's be correct anyway.) A verb is needed for a more parallel construction.
Besides increasing my fundamental knowledge of economics, including lectures in accounting, marketing and intercultural communication I have been able to extend my practical exp

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