ASAP: Please check my letter which I will soon send to UK Ambassador

Name Surname
Phone: XXX XX XXXXXX
Mobile: XXX XX XXXXXX
Email: Email Removed
Address: xxx xxx x, City, Country
His Excellency
The Ambassador
British Embassy
Address: xxx xxx x, City, Country

Dear Ambassador,
Tier 4 (General) Visa
I am an architect pursuing master degree at University College London (UCL).
I understand and appreciate the requirements for Visa, though I do not meet the requirements.
XXXX Foundation granted me a scholarship in the amount of $$. I do not hold the remaining money for now. My father will be able to cover the rest of the tuition and maintenance fees during the late November - mid December.
I would truly appreciate if you could give me a chance to attend to the program. It was hard for me to get into one of the world’s top universities. I passionately love and hope this obstacle will not be a problem to make my dreams come true.
Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely yours,
Name Surname

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