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Who wants to live to be a 100?

It cannot be denied that interest in the field of longevity has mushroomed in the last years. While many people believe that it is not the quantity but the quality of life that matters most, others are willing to drink an elixir of life to live as many years as possible. Why is it that people may want to reach the three digits or not?

Old age brings along physically and emotionally unstable conditions turning life into a matter of lasting rather than living. People would prefer dying to living through artificial lungs or being bedridden. Not only your body but also your mind may no longer remain sane and rational. As George Burns said: “First you forget names, then you forget faces. Next you forget to pull your zipper up and finally, you forget to pull it down.” Old people’s perspective about life changes as well. Apparently, the only thing they have to do every morning is to tie their shoelaces and wonder what else they can do.They look at themselves as a bother, thus, making them feel useless and depressed. Worst, however, are the feelings of loneliness and sadness which sweep over them after outliving all their siblings and friends.

On the flip side, the urge to live is very powerful. According to a recent poll, there is one reason which outweigh all the negative aspects that being a hundred raised: having the chance to meet your successive generations. The possibility to spoil your grand grandchildren seems like a bonus. Who would not like to live another decade and depart with fond memories and smiles?

To sum up, even though you have to wear adult diapers or depend on others help, it is worth being alive to appreciate the love of your beloved family. To hug and hum softly to your great grandchild until they fall asleep in your arms seems like a....... For sure, I would like to live to be a 100.

KrisBlueNZ · Accepted Answer

Who wants to live to be a 100?
In this context, "100" is short for "100 years old", which is an adjective phrase, not an article, so you mustn't use a with it. If you want to use an article, you would have to say "Who wants to live to be a 100-year-old person".

It cannot be denied that interest in the field of longevity has mushroomed in the last years.
You cannot say "in the last years" in that way. Some alternatives are "in the last three years", "in the last few years" and "in recent years".

While many people believe that it is not the quantity but the quality of life that matters most, others are willing to drink an elixir of life in order to live for as many years as possible.

Why is it that people may want to reach the three digits or not?
reach the three digits is wrong. First, the the shouldn't be there, but even "reach three digits" is not clear, in my opinion, although it's obvious what you mean. Perhaps you could say reach a three-digit age or achieve a three-digit age.
I think it would be better to replace "... that people may want ..." with "... that some people want ...". There are other ways to change the question as well. For example, "Why would some people want ...", "Why might [some] people want ...", "Why would a person want ...".
You cannot add or not to your sentence like that. If you want to ask why some people want to live to 100 and some people don't, you really need to ask that whole question: "Why is it that some people ~~may~~ want to reach a three-digit age and some (or other) [people] don't?" But I don't think you need to add that part; I think you're just asking why some people would want to reach that age.

Old age ~~brings along~~ suggest brings with it physically and emotionally unstable conditions , (comma here) ~~turning~~ suggest and turns life into a matter of lasting , (suggest comma here) rather than living.

I'm not sure what to suggest to replace physically and emotionally unstable conditions, but I think you need to change it. If you're talking about medical conditions that cause physical and emotional instability or weakness, you shouldn't use the phrase unstable conditions because that means that the conditions themselves are unstable; what you mean is that the conditions cause the person's body and emotions to become unstable. Perhaps you could use a phrase that includes the word deterioration. It's a good general word to describe what happens to all kinds of things as they gradually get older.

People would prefer dying to living through artificial lungs or being bedridden.
I thought bedridden was normally spelled bed-ridden but dictionary.com disagrees with me.
Without a qualifier at the start, that statement is too sweeping and general. Not everyone would rather die than live in those conditions. Perhaps you should add some or many at the start of that sentence.

Not only your body but also your mind may no longer remain sane and rational.
I know what you mean here, but what you're saying is that your body may not remain sane and rational, and your mind may not remain sane and rational; bodies are not sane and rational. To be clear, you could say something like "Not only does the body deteriorate, but the mind may no longer remain sane and rational".

As George Burns said: “First you forget names, then you forget faces. Next you forget to pull your zipper up and finally, you forget to pull it down.”
Great quote!

Old people’s ~~perspective~~ perspectives ~~about~~ on life ~~changes~~ change as well.
People is plural so you have to use perspectives and change.
A perspective is always on something, not about something.

Apparently, the only thing they have to do every morning is to tie their shoelaces and wonder what else they can do.
Your use of apparently is questionable. I think you're talking about what is apparent to the old person; if you use apparently without qualification like that, you are talking about what is apparent to you, the writer of the article, and/or the reader of the article. Actually I think the way you wrote it is quite charming, but not strictly correct. You could replace Apparently, with something like "It may seem to them that ..."
There was a space missing at the end of that sentence.

They look at themselves as a bother, suggest nuisance, thus, making them feel useless and depressed.

Making is incorrect in this sentence. This is a common error where the sense changes part way through the sentence. I think the grammatical explanation is that making is a continuous form, but look at is not continuous, so there is a mismatch. I suggest "They look at themselves as a nuisance, and this makes them feel useless and depressed." Or you could be less dogmatic and say "... and this may make them feel ...".

Worst, however, are the feelings of loneliness and sadness which sweep over them after outliving all their siblings and friends.
This is another mismatch. Outliving refers to the person, but the subject of the sentence is the feelings of loneliness and sadness. I will expand your sentence so you can see why it's wrong. "Worst, however, are the feelings of loneliness and sadness which sweep over them after the feelings of loneliness and sadness have outlived all their siblings and friends".

On the flip side, the urge to live is very powerful.
On the flip side is an Americanism and probably not appropriate in formal writing. You could replace it with On the other hand.

According to a recent poll, there is one reasonfor living to 100 which ~~outweigh~~outweighs all the negative aspects ~~that being a hundred raised~~: ~~having~~ the chance suggest opportunity to meet suggest know your successive generations.

You shouldn't say "there is one reason which ..." without stating what the reason is for.
Your use of the colon there is exactly right.
Again, having is wrong in that sentence; you can't say that "having something" is a reason. You can say that one reason for living to 100 is that "[If you live to 100,] you will have the opportunity to know ...". A sentence "[If you live to 100,] having the opportunity to know ..." doesn't make sense. My suggestion is a compromise for simplicity: "[If you live to 100,] [you will have] the opportunity to know ...". The "you will have" is implied. I'm having trouble explaining the rules here; maybe someone who can analyse the syntax properly could explain what's correct and what isn't...

I wouldn't use the phrase "your successive generations". By itself, successive generations is OK, but it sounds wrong when coupled with your or my or his or their. How about "... opportunity to know several generations of your descendants". Try to think of something better than that.

The ~~possibility~~ opportunity to spoil your ~~grand grandchildren~~ great grandchildren seems like a bonus.

Who would not like to live another decade and depart with fond memories and smiles?
"... and smiles" in that sentence seems inappropriate to me. How about "... fond memories of a life full of love?"?

To sum up, even though you suggest may here have to wear adult diapers or depend on ~~others~~ others' help (or depend on others for help) , it is worth being alive to appreciate the love of your beloved family.
I would use a period and new sentence after "To sum up". I'm not sure whether that is necessary though. It does seem like a separate sentence, and not part of the sentence that follows.

To hug and hum softly to your great grandchild until they fall asleep in your arms seems like a.......
I guess you're looking for a word to end that sentence with? Perhaps "wonderful blessing" would be appropriate. Blessing originally had a religious meaning, but it can be used for anything that makes you feel special.

For sure, I would like to live to be a 100.
"For sure" is another Americanism and it may not be appropriate in formal writing.

Don't be disappointed by the number of corrections. I'm pretty fussy. I think your article is well-structured, makes good points, and is actually quite charming.

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