Argumentative Paragrapf, what do you think?

Hi, I'm having English A2 Standard Level (first year) and our first assignment is to write an argumentative paragrapf. I just got done with it and I wonder if it's good or not, so please comment it .
Thank you.



It is clearly visible that the theme of the short story ”Sunrise on the Veld” by Doris Lessing is immortality versus mortality. Put in other words; reality. The narrator makes an obvious distinction between the boy’s personality before and after the buck’s death. In the beginning of the story the boy is very naive and he considers himself omniscient. He believe that he is in control of everything - “Even my brain–even that!” - and is full of superiority. Very early on, we get a clear picture of his childish persona. But then, when he sees the buck left for the ants to die slowly, his personality radically starts to change - “The knowledge of fatality, of what has to be, had gripped him...” - and he enters a stage where he begins to understand that everything has an end - “...Yes, yes. That is what living is.“. He now knew that life could end at any time and that there is nothing to do to change it. Thus, repeating myself, I conclude that the short story has a theme of reality by depicting the difference between immortality and mortality; the boy and the buck.