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Cedric2008 Posted 16 years ago
Grammar
Are they both correct?
The following are two sentences about the same thing. Are they both correct? Can you tell me which one is better if they are?why? thanks for your help:)
1:If we fail to analyze it properly and to understand it correctly, we shall become overcautious, not daring to lose opportunities. Like a boat sailing against the current, we must forge ahead or be swept downstream.
2:If we fail to analyze it properly and to understand it correctly, we shall become overcautious, not daring to lose opportunities,which means we,like a boat sailing against the current,must forge ahead or be swept downstream.
1:If we fail to analyze it properly and to understand it correctly, we shall become overcautious, not daring to lose opportunities. Like a boat sailing against the current, we must forge ahead or be swept downstream.
2:If we fail to analyze it properly and to understand it correctly, we shall become overcautious, not daring to lose opportunities,which means we,like a boat sailing against the current,must forge ahead or be swept downstream.
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The second version is too wordy. You lose your reader. But it's a conflicting message: It sounds like you're saying "Stop!
- The second version is too wordy.
- You lose your reader.
- But it's a conflicting message: It sounds like you're saying "Stop!
- Make sure we've got this properly analyzed and we understand it first" and they you're saying "Don't be so cautious!
- " What do you mean by "no daring to lose opportunities"?
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The second version is too wordy. You lose your reader.
But it's a conflicting message: It sounds like you're saying "Stop! Make sure we've got this properly analyzed and we understand it first" and they you're saying "Don't be so cautious! Forge ahead!"
What do you mean by "no daring to lose opportunities"? You WANT them to lose opportunities?
But it's a conflicting message: It sounds like you're saying "Stop! Make sure we've got this properly analyzed and we understand it first" and they you're saying "Don't be so cautious! Forge ahead!"
What do you mean by "no daring to lose opportunities"? You WANT them to lose opportunities?
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Sorry.it was my careless.
If we fail to analyze it properly and to understand it correctly, we shall become overcautious,not daring to emamcipate our minds and act freely. Consequently, we shall lose opportunities. Like a boat sailing against the current,we must forge ahead or be swept downstream.
The last sentence,"Like a boat sailing against the current,we must forge ahead or
If we fail to analyze it properly and to understand it correctly, we shall become overcautious,not daring to emamcipate our minds and act freely. Consequently, we shall lose opportunities. Like a boat sailing against the current,we must forge ahead or be swept downstream.
The last sentence,"Like a boat sailing against the current,we must forge ahead or
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