Are these two sentences worded in the proper way?

FYI- Sambryl is the queen. While the lords wanted to devote all of Impiltur’s military power to suppress the wyrms devastating the settled parts of the country, Taegan convinced Sambryl to send at least a lesser force west to assess the situation there. Lord Rangrim, a paladin of Ilmater, volunteered to lead this force, which would also be accompanied by Taegan and strengthened by six of the bronze dragons who served the queen.