Are these two sentences properly worded?

FYI- Aoth is the captain and comrade, Brightwing is the griffon, and Mirror is the ghost. Aoth and Mirror hastily made their way to Brightwing’s aerie, where the ghost cured the griffon, and afterward, the captain asked Malark to help him escape vivisection. Malark agreed to assist his comrade, and he convinced Lauzoril, the zulkir of the Order of Enchantment, to allow Aoth to return to active duty.