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Also at that time, Quenthel, Gromph, Methil, and a contingent of drow journeyed to Gauntlgrym to view the fledgling Xorlarrin city. Upon their arrival, they met Tos'un and Doum'wielle, who had been taken to Gauntlgrym by the Xorlarrins. When Doum'wielle protested her harsh treatment by the dark elves, Quenthel severely beat the young half-drow with her snake-headed whip.